shit this was so brilliant i don't Ben know what to say. your descriptions are flawless and your metaphors and everything is simply perfect.

So incredibly beautiful. I love this pairing. It's a new love, but still. Beautiful! I got shivers down my spine.

this beautiful.

i love the style you wrote this in, the descriptions you gave, and the way you wrote lily. it was gorgeous and wonderful and oh god, i just really felt like i was louis and going through all of this with him. only writers with real talent can do that, i my opinion.

just another wonderful job, keep writing.

Hiya!

Whoa. This fic is intense and rather gorgeous. Having written two Louis/Lily stories myself (haha, I thought it was just me who shipped them), it's become my OTP, so to find another story featuring them as a pairing was just so cool. I love your characterisation of Lily and of Louis, and the way they were presented as a pairing was beautiful. Plus, you dealt with some really sensitive issues well.

Not that I'm pimping or anything, but I have three stories on my author page that feature Loulily (one is kind of Scorpius/Lily, but it still has Louis/Lily in it), so if, like me, you love the pairing to pieces, you can always check out mine, as they are pretty underloved in terms of reviews.

Lovely fic :)

Soraya

omgosh, this was so very perfect, i don't have any words, just all these feelings!

Beautiful and tragic. You brought tears to my eyes. I wish I could write more for you as this story obviously deserves but honestly, there's not much to say other than to compliment you on how absolutely beautiful and well-written it was. Chilling to the bone. Thank you :)

Oh my god. This is so horribly, darkly beautiful. You write wonderfully and the imagery is amazing. Fantastic job.

Wow. This was extremely good. I think you did a great job with this and I would love to read more stuff from you! Keep up the lovely work!

Wow... Words cannot express just how amazing that was. You are seriously, seriously talented, and that was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read, so, wow.

You've got these unique writing style and ugh it just screams out 'come and read me' because it's just beautiful, and agjdhkjfsdjfdf, this was just amazing.

Lily was just so broken, and I felt so sorry for her, and I wished that Louis could make her stop, but he was too scared to do so, and he couldn't, and that was heartbreaking, it really was.

I loved how you started each section with a bit of dialogue and then "Picture Lily/the scene" and it just really worked for this piece.

And he wouldn't run away with her, and he just couldn't say why, and I loved your Louis, 'cause even though he wasn't as fucked up as Lily he was still pretty fucked up, and agjdjdjdsgjk, you just wrote that so well.

I loved the part about the unimaginative newspaper headlines, and Louis throwing them aside, and then when they found her dead sfhdashjf. And Louis felt guilty 'cause there was a bit if relief, and that cane across so well. I loved the funeral scene, and all these emotions and.

Simply put, this was flawless. Amazing.

Hello, remember me?

it's cool if you don't, cause i'm reviewing this piece of genius anyways. (;

KNOCK ME DOWN AND CALL ME SUSAN. THIS WAS JUST TOO CRAZY TO BE REAL. I SAT HERE WITH A STUPID EXPRESSION THAT WAS HALFWAY BETWEEN "that's my twinny for ya" and "holy smokes she did not write this she copied somewhere wow what a cheater" nmd "..." and "possibly the most beautiful thing i have ever read it my existence."

so wow where do i being. Um, so I loved the entire" Picture Lily" thing. Because in stories, it's like, you have to describe people really sneakily, which i get, but wow it was so cool just to see you go BAMF and describe her so so wonderfully. i can see lily so clearly all the time, and i really really love the descriptions. "her hair is a curtain of blood." nice, really nice.

"do you ever think about how all of this is going to be gone someday?"

just stunning. it is such a haunting quote and really sums up everything the story is supposed to be, and it's so fabulous.

your writing is mega inspiring and mega beautiful, and i love reading it all the time. i cannot believe that you actually convinced me of lily/louis, but you did it, and it was so fab. it was haunting and almost had a rust feel, (but not in the sense that you need to brush up on your skills) and it was hard but it felt sunny at some points and i'm rambling but i don't care.

so amazing, twinface!

so i'm going to be that annoying reviewer who's all like, i don't ever read/like cousincest/eating disorder fics but i completely ignored the warning just to be annoying. but yeah, i just couldn't stop reading this once i'd started because it was so gorgeous and well-done and i honestly have absolutely zero criticisms. lily and louis were both so messed-up and i just love characters like that and cousincest normally squicks me out but here it just fit the piece and basically it was beautifully tragic.

i love the way this begins, with "do you ever think about how this is all going to be gone someday?" it sets the tone for the piece so well. the descriptions - througout this whole piece - are just incredible, and i loved how you kept using "picture lily" i'm not even sure i quite know what it means, but it fits and it's perfect and i love it.

i love how this is louis's narration, but he kind of fades in the background in comparison to lily, how he lies and is quiet and he's always trying not to think about lily, even when he is. i don't really even know how to properly express myself, after reading this, because there's so many brilliant lines and so many feelings that this evokes that bascially i'm just a mess.

i think some of my favorite bits are these two, though:

"And Louis wants to say, "I wish you wouldn't do this to yourself," and, "Can't you see you're destroying us both?" and, "You're fucking beautiful," but he never does."

like, ahhh. aslgkjgalskj. yeah. that's really all i can say.

and then this -

"I just can't," he says, and he's not sure what he's replying to.

I don't know how these lines just come to you, but this is brilliant - it's almost understated, kind of an anticlimax, because the whole scene is building, and Louis "just can't" and it is just so perfect (i keep using that word). probably my favorite part.

and then the eleanor rigby part - i had to look that song up because i'm not a beatles fan, really, but once i got it, i really, really liked the allusion.

the ending is so awfully tragic, and what makes it more so is that louis knows he could have done something, maybe, but that he's almost relieved, not to have to deal with her, and try to help someone who really is somewhat beyond help. it did make me really sad though.

oh, and what i also liked about this was that we really only saw lily and louis (except maybe at the end) and it just kind of fit because it was like they were the only ones in their own little messed-up, self-destructive world.

just terrific, kaye, all of this. you should be massively proud of your talent; you are probably one of the only people who could ever get me to love a cousincest - i've never favorited one before - and definitely one of the best on this site.

amazing job!

This was beautifully done! And (imo) quite novel that you mentioned all the self-harming acts Lily performed. It's interesting to note that such could happen even in a world where one could get easily get things using magic. Happiness is too elusive, I guess.

Great job (:

ugh. honestly i hate you so much right now because everything about this was so fucking amazing. i've never been able to relate so much to any piece of writing before on ffnet. props to you for being able to handle so beautifully a subject as delicate as this.

/faved.

:)emmy

Okay this is the most fucking gorgeous thing i have ever read. I am honestly stunned beyond belief at how well this was written and how you used the prompts and just okay i really cant function properly wow

Lily. Lily, Lily, Lily. Everything about this was just Lily, even from Louis' POV, you could tell he thought the world centered around her. The comparison of him and as an angel and her as the devil was brilliant and she was Eleanor Rigby and how you used cacophony and yeah, i love all of this. Every last bit of it, really truly.

And just the fact that I reallyreally ship LilyLouis now after being diehard TeddyLily for what seems like years is just plain impressive and gah THIS WAS BRILLIANT OKAY, YOU DON'T NEED MY FANGIRLING TO TELL YOU THAT.

Always,

Summer