Fuck this story! why is Dante saying sorry to that bitch? Fuck you, good bye.

Dante should have smacked Louise.

Are you kidding me? Dante could have taken care of that golem in one swift movement. And Louise was very annoying and bitchy, why did Dante allow that when at the beginning he purposely intimidated her? This is utter horse trash.

Dante:Fuck your clothes

The whole facial reactions thing (0-0) stuff is actually kinda annoying. Really kills the mood for me lmao

Please stop existing. You cum covered popsicle.

Dante washes clothes by hand lol no this ain’t it’s painfully clear

Isn't this just a copy of Hill of Swords, just with Dante instead of Shirou? Even the dialogues and the sequence of events is largely the same, some lines not even changed.

Interesting beginning. There is one big foul though and that is the mix-up of present and past tenses, something which can be quite distracting at times. Honestly this is an old and complete story, so it might not make a difference now, but it needs to be said: writing a story in the past tense is fine and does the job adequately. Present tense storytelling can be amazing when done correctly however even experienced writers can and do fuck it up.

Other than this small issue it looks like this could be a good read.

Hubieras puesto clasificación M desde el principio. Así no tienes limitaciones

En algún momento su lujuria va a estallar

Puede negarlo pero sabe que quiere

No parece que abarque más de dos temporadas

Por un segundo creí que iba a invadir el castillo por aburrimiento

El Macho