I really enjoyed this! I do so love the fics that explore Obi-Wan as being the Chosen One.

Unread the entire story. I loved it. I always thought that Obi-Wan WAS the chosen one, not Anakin. I'm glad I wasn't the only one.

Hi,

I don't know if you still check the reviews for this story, but I felt compelled to tell you that I loved your story. It was a feel-good story, that was well written and with fantastic in-character characters. I especially loved the ending. I know some have complained about the fact that Obi-Wan never accepted the fact that he was the Chosen One, but I really liked that fact. I think it speaks of his humility, and possibly kept him from the dark side, he wasn't pressured by the weight of the galaxy on his shoulders, nor being lured to arrogance because of his powers.

Anyway, thanks for writing such an amazing story!

I'VE BEEN LOOKING FOR THIS STORY SINCE LAST YEAR AND I FINALLY CAME ACROSS IT AGAIN TONIGHT! *thwip twip victory dance

This is SUCH a beautiful story. I can't get enough of reading it. You're such an amazing, talented writer- words cannot describe the quality of your work, or the talent you so obviously possess. Thank you so, so much for this. PLEASE write again in future.

What a fun story. I love a good obi wan fic. Thanks for writing this.

This book was so cute! Thanks for the AMAZING fanfiction!

nice story

There's a difference between humility and pathetic. And your portrayal of Obi-Wan makes him seem pathetic.

The ending felt waaay too rushed, I have to say, by oh well. Overall, the idea and the story are excellent.
I don't approve of the fact that Obi-Wan never accepted himself to be the Chosen One, though. I know, I get it, this is supposed to be about him being too modest and insecure about his own talents... but, really? Even facing freaking Palpatine, in the moment when the Sith Lord TELLS HIM TO THE FACE that Kenobi's the Chosen One like Qui-Gon had told him and Obi-Wan has no hope for survival except doing his best and believing that he can defeat Sidious in the light of this revelation... are you seriously telling me he STILL DIDN'T BELIEVE IT?! No, sorry, I don't buy that. It's not like Obi-Wan at all, or any Jedi for that matter. Even if he were reluctant to believe, he would at least muster the determination to try believing it for a second, if only to win. This is pure psychology. Sorry, but no.
However I repeat, everything else is excellent. The focus of the story is Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan's relationship, and that was brilliant. So I'm not complaining. It was an incredibile read in every other aspect.
Amazing story, great job!

Wow. This was very unique! I never thought of Obi being the chosen one! Good job!

I noticed several times that meditate has been spelled wrong. You spelled it as mediate or mediating.

I loved this so much! Awesome job!

I adore this story; there unfortunately aren't enough decent Qui-gon Obi-Wan father/son fics out there; and the ones that exist aren't up to the level that this story is on in regards to length, breadth, and depth in both character development and prose.
So I would like to applaude you for writing a true masterpiece, and hope you continue to explore this pairing in the future.

However, I would like to add some constructive criticism. I noticed a lot of grammatical errors and apparent typos throughout this story, particularly words in the wrong tense. I feel as if some form of autocorrect may be responsible for this, but I can't be sure. Here is an excerpt from Chapter 7 as an example:

'The Sith suddenly backed* kicked Obi-Wan. Obi-Wan fell backwards to the ground with a groaned* and couldn't stop his body from rolling off the catwalk. "Obi-Wan!" His Master screamed to him in concerned* through the bond.'

Should be:
*back
*groan
*concern

There was also a number of spelling mistakes; you repeatedly use the words 'mediate/mediating' when you should be using 'meditate/meditating', just as an example of this.

Might I suggest going back through your fic and editing your chapters? Or enlisting the help of a beta? (I am one myself, and would be more than happy to comb through this for you). I feel such an exquisitely written piece deserves the attention.

But all that aside, brilliant work, you should be proud.

I really really really love this story

Loved it ! Awesome!