Ninpou: Gia Sekando was taken from One Piece.
NOW I WANT MY CYBER GRANDMA COOKIES!
P.S: Nice work with this it's pretty cool and I love the shocked moments everyone had.

Yeah? When is it going to be explein?! Are you ever going to continue the fic? And if not... then you are truly evil...EVIL I TELL YOU! Realy to leve it like that T_T and it was like such a good story to :'(

that was good keep the chapters coming

I forget the technique name, though I think it was sables, the Character must be Crocodile.

Hi. Finally got the time to visit your profile and decided to start reading this story.
Right. So, the bane of every writer's existence: grammat errors. I make them too, and a lot of them as you've probably noticed. Part of the problem is no thought our own hurry to post the chapters and the fact that some of them don't go through a beta. You have a few, although it seems to me that they're born of speed writting other than difficulties with the language. A d where there should have been an s, that sort of thing. It doesn't detract from the story and it's easily rectified by a quick check over. So on this department all is well :-)
One thing I have noticed in this chapter though, is when Sasuke screams while under Gaara's attack. You write it AHHAHAHAHHAH. It gives the impression of the Uchiha laughing rather than being in pain. Normally, when screaming, one either starts out slow and then goes for more power like thus: haaaAAAAAAA! Or, as is the case when suffering blows or in pain, it starts forceful but ends weak, as the character looses strength: AAAAAAAAAH. The H is the final exalation, when no sound comes out. Just something that caught my attention.
In regards to the story telling itself you do a good job. My only regret is that I personally would have liked a bit more of descriptive sections. This is a problem I sometmes also fall into but that I try to avoid. The reasoning being: it's fanfiction. One could say that since it's based on an original work that the readers must, in principle, be familiar with, there is no need to describe things in great detail. However this represents a great opportunity for you to add your own spin to the world you're playing with. For example: while ilustrating the battle between Naruto and Neji, you could expose more their personal thoughts, give it a bit more description. This wpould enable you to show how your characters think, what makes them tick, rather than having to tell the audience directly. Or in another example: "Giving his half assed excuse, Kakashi flashed away to the spectators' stands where the jounin-senseis stood." Here, you could have used this section to expose a bit more of Kakashi's character. For instance: what were his mannerisms? Did he deliver the justification flatly and uncaring? Or was there and undercurrent of tension? Was his pose relaxed? Why/Why not? Perhaps it could be a means to defend himself in a situation where he knew he was not having the best of behaviours. Was his defense of why he instructed Sasuke in the Chidori patronizing/arrogant or was it defensive? What were the thoughts/reactions of his peers (not to the act of teaching it, but to how he justified it)? This would permit you to explain the relationships and interactions between Kakashi and the other Jounin. Did he feel conflicted with what he thought he had to do? Or were Naruto's interpretation that he just didn't care correct?
Things like this would help to flesh out the story and enrich the Universe you're changing.
This review is getting long so I'll probably end here. I just want to point out that it was not my intention to come across as criticizing or flamming. You do good work and the story has potential. I like it. I am just trying to help you out. If you feel I've been too patronizing/arrogant/Kakashi that is not my intention and I once again remark that all the 'problems' I've pointed out here, I do as well.
Update soon. I'll keep reading.

interesting ne

Awesome job with the story please update asap thank you

Awesome idea to use Crocodile's desert sparda. And brillent that you sealed the Naruto and Gaara together. This chapter was very good transition to the main battle. Hope you keep up the good work.

Cool chapter. Gaara's move is based on Crocodile's Desert Spada isn't it?

Yay little traitor boy is no more ninja.

not bad, could've been longer, and you could've have had the other jonins inform Kakashi of Naruto's match and then their reaction to Sasuke's injury. reply

that was awesome! is naruto still going to be a winder user? reply

great story

need more

awesome