I really liked this line: "She was like a multi-pileup car accident or a train-wreck. Sure you'd hate it but you just can't tear your eyes away once you've gotten a glimpse." I also liked how the number of shots kept increasing xD

This was very good, very ambiguous like OxEyed said, I totally agree. And I loved the title. D Keep it up! Good work!

~Jess (My Misguided Fairytale)

Sounds like Mai and Dino have similar problems. Bakura and Marik are still hanging around and causing problems.

Gosh, all your pieces have been strong this season but I think this one is my fave so far, you really have a knack for writing club scenes and everything that belongs to that genre.

He waits with the rest of them. While most people (guy or girl) who show up solo draw uncomfortable amounts of attention to themselves, he blends into the jagged shadows of the brick wall, practically unnoticed.

Ooooh gosh. That was sublime. Thank you for writing this.

After I finished this, I went back through and read it again. I'm impressed with how well the ambiguous dialogue worked when you consider all four characters involved. Definitely the kind of story you'd sit and think about.

As is usually the case, the little details are what define the fic. The smell of sand, the white in his hair are more obvious, but I really enjoyed some of the more subtle ones: the way he compulsively checks for his wallet, the way she takes part in the crowd's behavior.

I really enjoyed this. Great job!