Jesus jumping Christ on a pogo stick! This is easily the duttiest incarnation of Lavi I have ever had the good fortune to witness... Actually, they're both total hoe bags. The rimming, the spanking. Woah. If I'm honest, I'm a little frightened haha. Awesome

Amazing
The best one-shot ever :D
Also super hot :3

Awh, I was hoping this would continue to see what people at school and their friends thought about their relationship ;-;

I haven't read the manga but I enjoyed this story as it was an AU,I'm gonna read the manga now!good one...

utty but sweet. Love it

*noseblleed*

You are a god.

Very good! Intriguing plot, sexy lemon, what more could you want?

One thing I would suggest is focusing on sentence separation. You tend to put two sentences together with no punctuation and it made me have to re-read bits.

Keep writing! I loved it!

I really enjoy reading your stories, this one is good

that was... HOT!

But i'm somewhat confused or pleasantly surprised to see things i've chased to see in them for some time, it's like you have read my mind... Have you o_O relative perverted soul? ))