So sad. Nicely written.

oh, why god, why. I'm not re-reading this because I'll start crying, it's just such a lovely, sad, heart-breaking fic. That device of chopping sentences. Brilliant, just brilliant. Really, really loved this one-shot, even if it's so painful and I don't know. I really felt Artemis pain. It's like you broke my heart in tiny little pieces.
Thank you, thank you so much for sharing it!

Wow... I do like they way u used choppy sentences to illustrate Arty's thoughts. Well done!

Loved it. Very sad

I like the way you wrote this, with choppy sentences and such. Didn't drag out unnessassiary ideas, but played with them and let the wisps go. I enjoyed reading this very much, very nice job.

I absolutely love the blunt and direct style of the piece! At first thought, you'd think it was vague; but, in actuality, it's the abruptness of the words which holds so much meaning. I really, really think you should write in this style more, because you seem to be really fluent and comfortable with it!

This was so... Heavy. But really good. And the choppiness just added the affect. So sad, but I believe they'd eventually get through it together and try for another some day... In the land of optimism at least.

very uniquely and creatively written. i love it.

This is beautiful and sad.