good job

wow this was wonderful! I loved it, please keep on writing, you have a good style ;D

Aww, soooo cute! now I feel like a bodyguard to them, trying to prevent bad things to happen

Its nice to hear a story from different points of view

Aww, I Hope the OC dont die

heh nice kid :)

Somehow its a beautiful suicide note

Seriously, i feel sorry for Russia... And for the OC...

Oh my, why does all the bad stuff have to happen to Ivan... I feel sorry for hm...

Heh I like fluffy Russia

Awww, how cute :3

Really, I dont feel comfortable with Belarus around either... But cute, even though I would have been embarrased if I told a stranger, his eyes were beautiful. Blushing hard!

Uhhhhh, nice first meeting, I liked it :)

Hello Toxic-Vengeance-Killjoy! Do you mind if I give you some pointers for your story?

First of all, I really think this story could use some more description... Drag it out a bit. Include description even BEFORE Reader-san wakes up, you know, that half-awake sequence where you’re not REALLY aware of your surroundings? Describe the smell first, then the air (Is it cold? Warm?), then imagine HOW reader-san wakes up. Slowly? Lazily? Mutters “five more minutes” as light streams into her eyes?

Also for description: try to initiate the fear factor of Ivan. Make the Reader’s mind reel with horrid possibilities instead of just saying: “He could be a sadistic murderer or psychopath.” And when Ivan leaves to bring food to the reader, wouldn’t the reader feel even a BIT of solitude in an unfamiliar room with nobody around? Would she feel scared? Worried? Maybe then would be a good time to describe the actual room Reader-san is in! Remember to describe SETTING in the five senses instead of just focusing on dialogue.

“-I what? "I did? How so?"-” Why don’t you try to make Reader-san reach for her memories? Make her WANT these memories. Make her strive for these memories, but fail miserably and give up.

An example of something that needs WAY more description: The porridge! What does it smell like? What does it TASTE like? Is it a watery soup, or a thick broth? I found this to be a big hole in the writing content.

So, that’s about it. Just much, MUCH more description is all I can say for right now... It seems interesting, but for now, I think it's lacking a bit TOO much for me... So, best of luck!

YOU'LL NEVER BE FORGIVEN! DX