Oh shit is right, please update!

You're better finish this amuto story author! Don't worry I will waiting :)

Update!:)

*Whimper, whimper* Please... *wolfie paws up begging* Please... *Wagging tail* More?

I wanna know what happens next ! Love your story !

Ok, please tell me you're writing more?
I only have one comment, and that's about putting the character's inner thoughts in Italics, though I realize that you put the singing like so. You could also use "" to mark the beginning and end of a thought. Oh, and there are some great bands out there with female leads. One song that I think would fit this story a little better than "Just Like You" is the rock cover of Rihana's "Where have you been", done by Cruskin. Look up Where have you been rock cover on youtube, and it should be the first one to come up -
Hope this helped and I hope you'll write more to this story. Good Luck and Happy Word Smithing!

it's a good story, but sadly short

just hope you update

Ethel Star

pretty beast.

Please update soon ! 3

Awesome! Don't to the stupid critics! Keep on going!

It's against the rules of this site to include songlyrics in a story. You'll have to remove them, although you can mention at the beginning for your readers to listen to it or you can mention the name of the song somewhere else.

If you don't remove them, you could get reported. If that happens, you'll lose the story, your uploading abilities for a set amount of time, and it's even possible to lose your account.

Lots of love,

- Mrs. Flamer.

(Member of Critics United.)