this is just plain great

Hmm.. What to say.. Well
1. It looks like you wrote a chunk of writing then split it up.
2. I immediately found grammar mistakes such as the speak marks.
3. I found I would just skip through most of it and found it a bit boring.
I know it's hard to write a story based off a game with all the dialogue, and I know you can do better, so keep trying.
Keep up the good work! XP

(adding last part of name) password p.s. Its true. Anyway tempering with zelda and harry porter makes iy confusing

More description would be great!