Gwen went back to working on her entrance exam in the newly destroyed library?

I love the specifics of how he takes down the bots so cool

I don't like Harry and I don't like how Gwen responds to him. And its all sweet and what not to worry about Pete but don't punish him for his role as a superhero. His duty

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absolutely awesome as usual man! please write more spidery though 3

Wait did you turn Sandman into a kid? Interesting...

Anywho, a very short chapter here with a old foe turned into a kid.

I actually don't have much to say about this one, I don't know it was weird in a good way.

Nuff Said?

Well, I felt like I was reading a more modern version of Spider-Man 2 in a way especially at the scene where he was talking to Spidey. Nothing wrong with that, I just find it pleasing.

Nevertheless, I have to applaud you for making Harry suicidal. That was something I could see him doing.

The action was great, Spidey's mini speech to Cap & Tony was cool as well.

Though I have to say that you spelled Jameson wrong so for future issues involving the Jameson family keep that in mind.

One other thing, so you going to adapt the Clone Saga? If so, be wary of the material from the 90s if you choose to do so. I mean there were some good things there just not executed well enough. Nonetheless, I like that hint of Miles becoming the Jackal when you know Gwen kicks the bucket.

Overall I am continuing to witness greatness in this fic.

I see that there still some sort of hostility still between Cap & Tony. That's interesting to say the least, it shows that even though they are friends, they still have some issues to sort out.

Although I have to say I don't like Ock's portrayal in this he's talking like he is Venom & that is really weird. I rather have Ock speaking like a mad scientist but it's not my story. Nevertheless, it is really weird to hear Ock talk like that.

Nevertheless, great chapter plenty of action all around. Same complaints as usual yadda yadda
Well off to the next chapter. Oh wait I forgot to say this about the previous chapter, I like how you placed a obscure character in this fic in Carolyn Trainer, the female Ock & also putting Anya in this as well. I have read ahead & seen that she becomes Spider-Girl which is awesome! Nevertheless, this got me thinking you should also put together a "Amazing Friends" thing with Spidey, Anya, Iceman, Firestar & another Marvel teen hero. Sounds intriguing doesn't it?

I felt this chapter made up for the lack of action from previous chapter.

Points of interest for me.

Harry getting kidnapped (nothing new there.)

The increased tension.

The dialogue between Peter & Gwen.

Other than that, I have no real complains for this one other than you know the usual spelling. Sorry taking a English class in community college where you have teachers complaining about that stuff. Nevertheless off to the second part.

Well... I find it fascinating that you are going the sympathetic route with Ock, giving him a kid & of course his wife that was introduced in the 2nd film. I have to say it is interesting as I make it out to be.

Nevertheless, not much action in this & that's okay sometimes we need a rest from the usual action in superhero fiction.

However there was one thing that was pretty corny & lame. That fart head thing that Peter said that... was pretty lame for Peter to say. Yeah could have put something better there... Nonetheless, aside from that remark you were able to deliver a cool, calm & quiet chapter.

A nice chapter showcasing the impending friendship with Peter & Tony. In a way it reminds me of Tony & Bruce in the film. I also have to ask how the hell Bruce's wife is is it Betty? I didn't see a name so I am currently puzzled by this. Nevertheless, excellent action, great dialogue & stuff like that.

Nevertheless, there were some mistakes but nothing major just spelling.
Well with that said, I'm off to reading the rest. So expect more reviews from me all day & night or tomorrow.
Ciao!

Hello there, I must say this was a strange chapter to read. I have stumbled upon this & I gotta tell ya I really enjoy the story thus far!

This chapter felt as if I was reading a demented fairy tale so to speak & I believe it worked here.
The villains here I found them interesting & I would like to see them come back if possible. Nevertheless, just don't follow the same story that you have told here because well they will become weak in my mind. One more thing to add on, I love the interaction between Peter & Gwen it felt very similar to the film's perception of the two lovebirds.

However, I do have to point out one of my issues with it & that is why did you make Gwen the damsel in distress? Since this story seems to be influenced by the recent film, you could have done something else since in the film, Gwen is more of a fiery love interest who can hold her own if possible.

Nonetheless, I also found some spelling mistakes within the chapter when I did a bit of proofreading so I will continue to look out for that when I continue to read on. One more thing I have to talk about is that these chapters are pretty short nothing wrong with that because it will allow the reader to read the chapter rather quickly which is actually good. I just want some more fluff within the story.

Nevertheless, I look forward to reading the rest!

Really good read...one of the best

You could make some competition for Gwen like bring in Charlie. And for the action bit u could bring in villains from like the fantastic four so they get featured it it too :/

Nice story. Looking forward to an update.