The only problem I have with this story is that he had 6 legendary pokemon and did not use all of them in the final round of the league.

Update soon

stop saying pikachu he already evolved in the story you're messing up your own story

here it says he plans to use Darkrai and Pikachu but Pikachu is Raichu. also it seems this happens a lot with stories where Pikachu evolves cuz we've been seeing Ash and Pikachu for years

like... not love. Honestly, you can't expect someone to love somebody the first few times they meet. Love is too string of a word.

Liked the beginning but I can tell you became more disinterested in the story as time went on. I think it was a great idea but could’ve used more development. This is also a reveiw being posted in 2019 so... there is a slim chance you will see this. On the off chance that you do I would love to see you redo this FanFiction.

Well, this love was sudden... Is there a back story in the other chapters?

Hi, I know that you have marked this as complete but I noticed a continuality error. In an earlier chapter you had pikachu evolve into raichu but now he is suddenly back as a pikachu.

Dats a raichu not pik

the pikachu evolved into a Raichu

AshXSerena

Hi I know this story was completed log ago but I just have a few comments. I really like the story as it is engaging but you are very confusing at times. I’m still not sure whether ash has a mandibuzz or Braviary because you kept switching between them at the beginning of the story. Also, didn’t Pikachu evolve into Raichu? Why is it back to a Pikachu again? Anyway those are just some things I saw.

Pretty please do a sequel or alert us if it gets a sequel done by someone else please.

Genial vb

My last name Yma is pronounced Y-ee-ma.
You made it very dramatic. I didnt like it . it was very boring. :(