You should've gotten a different beta reader, because they didn't do anything. Holy fuck was this bad.

It is a good story, it is curious that it says finished when it is not, so I will suppose that it was vandalized, a pity, a greeting, see you, bye!

Poor Haku, never stick your dick in crazy.

All that training your oc did with Haku and Naruto and she couldn’t win her prelim battle dumb lmao

You really don’t deserve to live. The action and dialogue seem forced and unnatural, and your writing was unfinished and constructed poorly. This is the equivalent to ripped-off children’s fairy tales. Horrible, copied work is the base of your entire abomination you call a ‘story’.

This is fucking terrible. Your grammar and spelling are abysmal, and I can’t believe that you chose to be a writer. Fuck off, and KILL YOURSELF.

This is kinda late but Orochimaru can summon himself out of one of the curse marks so...

well I get to the end and find I wasted 4 hours reading this since the sequel was never made

Please update the story author-chan

I loved this but where is the next ine?

Hahahahaha that jingle bell sing had me crying in laughter

hagrid? lmao

huh... naruto evolving into wolverine?

Ggg

I like Kairi she is funny