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It was good that they didn't get caught in that closets

Ok so someone dislikes it and said she underage then why would you read it then HUH?!. Anyways I loved it good job!

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This was awesome!

I absolutely loved it! It is well written and the personalitys were in check! You're awesome!

Pretty good story. And I too like the gender bent version better, I feel this story is wonderfully written and has great potential,
-Alice Cards

You should add to this. With other events like they sneak away during a gumball ball, or gumball holiday party or something.

i think u should say he pumped his penis in and out faster and faster and fionna groans mashallee smirks and goes faster gumball walks in and gasps and him and mashallee fight that is iust my opinion add detail 0v0 okay0u0

Oh my glob I LOVED IT!

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This is really cute and sweet! Really enjoyed it!

this was- OH MAH GLOB- so amazing! you did such a great job! maybe next time you can do more than one chapter. I would love to see how you would write a Fiolee story not just a one-shot. PLUS I LOVED LOVED LOVED EVERY LEMON IN THERE AND I WANT MOOOOOORE!

...who leaves their guests alone with someone they don't even trust for THAT LONG?!

ooOOOOoooooo! I loved it! :) :) :) :) : ) ;) ;) ;)