Cute. Though it moved really fast towards the end.

This was very well thought out, but it seems to be somewhere between an outline/plot and a story that can stand on its own. If you were able to expand more on the conflict points - i.e. how the miscarriage happened, more detail on the way they each reacted to it (we know that Derek went out and slept with someone else, but maybe describe how Casey found out about that), or maybe how Derek convinced Casey to forgive him.

The dialogue, which I think it was meant to be, wasn't great. You wrote it in the same way they would've said it, except you didn't use quotation marks and particularly Casey's sentence was a run on, even if she had said the same way.

Other than that, I really enjoyed it. I hope you write more soon because you can only get better with practice !

cry5tal.

Beautiful!

It was rushed and lots of info was left out but it was cute and realistic and very nice to read. I think you should make a longer story that tells all about the "middle" parts we missed. Keep writing!

Awesome!