This is very well-written. It's true to source, yet even on its own, it's a genuinely intriguing mystery adventure. Definite fav!

Congrats on the new way of life.

Well Cerburus didn't last very long did they ?

Who is coats?

Real good. What's the Asari Civil War all about. What story is that in?

Great chapter.

I, from the first chapter, like this. 2 years and only six reviews is a shame. This fic deserves way more attention then the community is giving it.

i only read chapters 1 and 2. 1 is very hard going because the amount of sci-fi terms thrown at the reader straight away is very overwhelming! very difficult to keep up with and i am quite knowledgeable about the ME universe and back ground.
i will congratulate you however for the vision of the the story. not basing it on shep and co was just the kind of story i came here looking for. just a slower or more detailed start and i would be able to read on.

Huh, I must say that I'm definitely intrigued by this stab at a canon sequel to Mass Effect 3, with a completely original cast of characters and plot. The summary has definitely piqued my interest with its allusions to political intrigue in the galactic aftermath of the Reaper War.

The writing's great so far, that much I can't complain but it's the pacing and world-building that has left me wanting more. The first few chapters were a little on the short side, which I felt didn't do justice to attempts at world-building and establishing this new "universe's" status quo. I don't quite know all that much about who the lead character is, and the context of the situation that he's been placed in. It would definitely hook the readers in more if you took some time to more concretely establish the universe and cast before getting the plot moving.

My second point is that I felt maybe you rushed a little bit to get the action and excitement going with this chapter. I felt the stakes (both personal and circumstantial) of the protagonist wasn't fully spelt out for the readers to be invested in the story in the first few chapters. To remedy that, I think that maybe you need to dedicate more to painting the backdrop for the action to unfold and stuff to blow up in. The stories are a lot better when you actually care for the people who are blowing stuff up or getting stuff blown up around them.

Overall, the story definitely has potential to kick off into something better as attested to by this chapter where the plot starts to thicken. I have no doubt that things are gonna start escalating from this chapter onwards but these are just my two cents.

Keep up the good work on the writing though. You're doing a good job so far and I'm sure you have plenty more room to grow as a writer.

looks great so far. keep it up.

This is getting even more interesting.

Hmm, interesting start. Nice to see more OC stories, especially one set after ME3. I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Promising start.