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That was absolutely amazing.
Please continue.

It was so sweet! To bad all hell breaks loose and what not

As far as lemons go, this was an excellent, emotionally provocative piece. Love to see what else your capable of writing :3

its good just different then the way it had it in the book but its really good for a Damitri POV its good

I love your writing, but I don't think it fits to VA. I mean, I love their quite romance, saying nothing just feeling it. and even if they talk, it is not going to be like this. I mean those things are not really Dimitric!

I love this story
i know u probably got a lot of these but this was really GOOD!

I really like this, my only thing was I wish some cute teasing had went on with her in her panties. And I wish for play had of lasted longer.
But it was very well written. I loved it. I would love to chat with you. I do a lot of Roleplay story lines as Rose.

I like your sort of writing and believe you did a good job keep writing

it was amazingly sweet love... the way you captured dimitri's mentality and his way of thinking for rose was beautiful! i hope you must have written for last sacrifice hotel scene! i will be dying to read it!

you are unbelievable, great job. if its your first time(writing)- then you have a great future! really!

If this isn't perfection, I don't know what that is.

Good good good!

Awesome. Amazing. You did a really good job.

Wow! This is sooooo good! I think this is the best one ive read so far! Awesome job truly! Keep it up ur an awesome writer!