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awwwwwwwwww great ending :3

Grammar was horrible but over all story was great!

It's a good fanfiction. Hope you will make another gralu story with indonesian languange hehehh

love it gray and lucy forever

that was a good story

OMG! That is the hottest Graylu fanfic I ever read! But you're grammar is kinda wrong... Anyway this was the most hottest,sexiest and best Graylu fanfic EVER!

Nice 1

I don't know if English wasn't your first language or you were rushing, but there are many mistakes in this that don't make it enjoyable to read. Most of your verb tenses made no sense.

its a very nice story! i suggest you read HeatHcLIFF65's Guise at me differently graylu version. its very good! just like this one! )

I have to say that this story actually confused the hell out of me due to the fact that you:

Have constant spelling mistakes.

Grammar issues

and jumbled sentences that make no sense.

Seriously, if English isn't your first language, I understand. But if it is, you either rushed it, or you have no clue what spell check is.

Amazing.

Grammar , fix it

Is this named for the Asking Alexandria song? XD good job.

i liked it even tho im a NaLu fan
it was good