... can you continue this...

Good story. Keeps suspense and interest well - you can't stop in the middle. Good added details from previous version.

Oof. I liked the dialogue between Mykale and Fenris - the beginnings of understanding for them both, I think, but in particular Fenris. It was a real challenge to the way he thinks, without being overtly *challenging* for him.

I'd recommend a trigger warning at the beginning though as although not graphic, it does go to dark places (not just literally) and might upset or trigger some people who have experienced abuses.

A couple of typos that could be ironed out to make it even smoother - for example, "You asked me what manor of mage I am" - manor should be manner. And later, Isabela refers to Fenris' taunt body instead of his taut body. Stuff that slips through spellcheck!

I really like your characterisation though and would be interested to see how relationships develop beyond the one-shot, should you ever expand on it!

Very good. Nice interaction and development between Hawke and Fenris.

Fantastic!

This is one of the best fanfics ever! The characters are perfect and the i like the comparison. :D Definatly going on my favorites.

This is well done and lovely. Thank you! Your Fenris is magnificent - I can hear that growly voice in his dialogue now - and your Hawke is very similar to how I play mine. Well done, indeed. Please write more!

One of the best mage Hawke x Fenris oneshots I've read. It was awesome. :)

Love it! Very well articulated reasons. If only everyone in Thedas could just be more open-minded and less bigoted... can anyone imagine such a world?

That was very well written. I enjoyed your story very much. Nice use of setting, mood, and dialogue to create a good read.