This story had a lot of potential, but it kind of fell flat in the execution. This would have been a hundred times better if you had just written it linearly. Start with Chloe’s ability manifesting, her telling Clark, Professor X showing up, the fight with juggernaut, and on into the story. This jumping around, the flashbacks, and very important parts of the story being simply explained instead of shown really ruined the impact of the story. A story built around flashbacks is incredibly hard to pull off, I think it would have gone a lot better if you just wrote it from the beginning. That and the amount of time travel. Time travel is cool, it could create really interesting stories, but too much of it is just confusing and slightly annoying. Personally, I always hated the big time travel arcs, simply because traveling through time is just weird. It gets confusing, and paradoxical, and down right insane. You get stuck in the distant past or future? That sounds like an adventure. But others? Like, hey this guy jumped back in time to kill you so we followed him to stop it. Seems simple at first, but how could he have followed? Someone went back in time thousands of years, you would have no warning that they changed anything, because all of history has now been altered including your own life, you don’t even remember the person you were supposed to save from the time traveler as they are already dead. But then the bad guy in the future would have no reason to travel back in time, as his enemy is dead, and so he wouldn’t take the trip. Since he never travels back, his enemy never dies, and history changes completely once again. Basically, all of reality will now be caught in an endless loop. We already have Smallville and X-men together, why muddy the waters with time travel? A lot of potential in this story, but it could have been done better.

It has been two days short of forever since I've read the comics.

I do remember that Clark gained strength as he grew up, I'm sure other abilities such as heat vision didn't appear until his teenage years.

Maybe his abilities need for him to have stored a certain amount of sunlight before they manifest?

Clark and Jean, this is the first time I have ever seen the pairing.

But now it seems natural, Lois is ok but way too normal.

Who should Lois get? I vote for Natasha! Both are snoops!

Ahh time travel paradoxes... how you confuzzle me~

So basically you made Clark a pussy. The average bullet travels at 2,500 feet per second (around 1,700 mph). There is also the fact that Superman even as a boy could lift far more that a 900 tons.

i knew that was going to happen, but i kinda hoped it wouldnt...im sorry but this story is over for me...good luck

ugh...really interesting story and you write very well, i just really hate the future timeline and traveling back in time BS...really to me if that were to happen just the first person who travels back in time should win because you could control everything...and if you fail its just goes to show how fracking stupid you(the time traveller) really are...I wish you would have done this story without it...

Well, while not bad there are some rather glaring errors that need to be attended to.

One is your abuse of ellipses (the ... thing you are fond of) and some more proper punctuation. That is probably the major one of my little peeves you are touching.

The second on the list is that you need to be more consistent with your tenses. Gave instead of give for instance. It happens here and there throughout your work. Other than that, not bad.

awesome please continue and great writing

love this story :p finally a great clark and jean story awesome

Excellent story so sorry to see it end.

Good story so sorry to see it end.

Great story so sorry to see it end.

awesome

Omg Great Finale for this story