Hey, I like your story. And it really is too good to just leave it alone, I hope for a sequel too :)
But I have a question, I can't find the original story, only the cleaned version. I already visited your profile but the link directed me back to it and not to another story.
So, could you maybe create a second link or write it as a note at the end of the story?
It would be really nice :)

Nice!

Yesssss! That was great! Oh but it can't be just a one shot! It is too good for just one go :(. But still thank you. I hope you find it in you to write a sequell. One does not simply write something so good and don't write asequell (A picture if Boromir comes to mind lol). Cloud/Vincent pairings are to few and from those fewer still are actually good.
Any way I loved this one :). Thamk you for it.

Wow. I really liked the ending of this story. Your general plot was good, straight forward, uncomplicated; effective.

Constructive Criticism: Your grammar needs a little bit of work...it seems like some of your joining words got lost in your push to get the story out. example: "...It [his heart] beat like on ecstacy". That kind of error improves with time and careful proof reading. It's small things like that that will help the story flow more smoothly.

Otherwise, much enjoyment.

PS-was too lazy to log in for signed review, but that is my real user name.

Smooth writing. Love the way you portray Vincent.

Wow, I didn't think that it was going to be too involved with Vinnie personality, but I was pleasently surprised. Lots of detail, and a nice dash of drama! Hope that it would work out for them in this. Nice work!