Very good, overall. On to year two.

Very nice. I like the humorit's pretty subtle, not too to the face.
I find it pretty interesting that Hermione was demoted to a side character. Usually, people either keep the 'golden trio' or dismantle it entirely.

One thing has me wondering though: during the 'duel' chapter, you mentioned that 'Filtch drew his wand'. What does that mean, as he's a squib?

A small typo in the section where Fate buys her wand. A missing space.

just a little FYI for you the wordtaskforce" is not a single word several places in this chapter I have noticed that the two words are put together but they are separate words please correct this are and I hope this information helps you.

a note to the author the majority of the world does not know what Japanese honorifics are or what they mean my advice don't use them use their English counterparts more people will understand that better.

I have a question is there going to be a sequel to this story?

how and how did you go from 1st year to 4th or 5th Year in one chapter come on man be consistent

Hahaha! The omake... The sorting hat refused to sort Fate only because it doesn't want another front row seat to Testarossa's version of light training...

Just one question: How come Detective Fate didn't bring up the possibility of the Flamels having given Dumbledore a fake or defective/sabotaged proto-stone to use as bait?
If I were the Flamels I'd make a stone that's exactly identical in all ways except that the gold it makes dissolves after a few weeks (like leprechaun gold but longer lasting) and that produces poison instead of elixir.
If someone finds the trap and returns it to the Flamels, reward them. If they use it for themselves, they'll get exactly what they deserve.

There interference will most likely mess up all other parts in the story. Like Order of Phoenix, Half Blood Prince, and the Deathly Hallow. Which is a disappointment as well. Also I think it would have been better if Nanoha and Fate was not able to contact the spaceship at all. To much interference starts to mess up the story. I also didn't like the fact that Nanoha and Fate's wands are sisters either sense Raising Heart and Bardiche are not related. If you ask me they should have been different.

Fates wood should represent black while her core should represent yellow
Nanoha wood should represent white while her core should represent pink

This way they are both similar to Raising Heart and Bardiche. Dragon Heart wouldn't fit that at all I don't think.

Anyways this is my thoughts and the only think I did not agree with is Nanoha and Fate medaling in Harry Potter before the end of the story. It messes up everything that should have happened in the other books and if this started in the first story then that means that book three through seven is going to completely suck.

To much interference at the start is not going to help anything at all.

I just finished reading the entire story and enjoyed it a lot, I look forward to diving into your sequel soon after even though I know through looking at your profile that it is now on Hiatus and unlikely to be continued.

I very much enjoyed reading about Harry, Fate, Nanoha and Ron's friendship, it was very interesting seeing how their dynamics changed and how they aren't as close to Hermione because of them.

I think my favorite moment in the story was when Nanoha slapped Ron for yelling at Hermione, but he refused to back down and that Nanoha couldn't think of a good reason why she did so.

It represented two of the characters biggest traits in Ron's stubbornness and Nanoha's headfirst nature, yet it also showed the flaws in that kind of approach for Nanoha and it also showed that while Nanoha objected in principle and felt Ron crossed a line, she didn't exactly Hermione very much easier.

I also really appreciate that while Ron's negative traits are there, his many positive traits are on full display as well, it's gets really annoying at how much the Harry Potter fanbase seems to hate him for being a relatively normal kid, it's nice to see him keep that role in this story.

Finally I look forward to looking at your other stories and checking out your favorite list, I'm sure I'll enjoy them.

This was an absolutely amazing story with a crossover I really haven't seen before. I fucking love your Nanoha and Fate, just take all the kudos I can give. And thank you so much for writing and sharing this!

OKay i'm done with this now after finding out nanoha gives up being a seeker or not able to fly made this very much not fun anymore. I became disappointed when I found out Nanoha just practically give Cho the stupid position away and the fact she lying to everyone that she is not good. When actually she's better then Cho. She needs to grow a backbone and fight for herself this damn selfless cap is old... Now I go look for one that maybe will have at least Nanoha Flying.

Well this is interesting, but i think it be even more interesting if there devices and mage stuff would work other then Telepathy... I think them being stranded there with no communication and functional stuff would have been more funny.

Now Onto the next chapter...

Shouldn't memory tampering be illegal under TSAB law? I wanted to see Nanoha arrest the obliviators! Presumptuous pricks, like they have any right to tell Nanoha she's not allowed to use magic. Sigh. Oh well.