bruh the oc literally has no self control or any thought process whatsoever like damn bitch chill and think shit through pLeAsE

I might have to drop this. Your writing is good and all, but your oc is getting on my nerves. She is such a noodle! I mean what does sauske see in someone so useless? She's on sakuras level! If i get bored i might come back to it jhst cus I like possessive sauske.

She seriously getting her ass kicked by sakura? Seriously?

So... The oc is kinda weak during all this. As far as I know she has enough chakra to do the fancy Justus she used before but she's just standing there. Hopefully she actually does something soon cus so far she just does a lot of standing around.

I haven't started the story yet, but please tell me you didn't go for the sick suggestion someone made for rape. Like I understand some writers do have that traumatic experience in their ff... But I feel dirty seeing someone comment multiple times calling for the rape of the of.

Finish the story and soon please!

Oh my gosh I love this story so much! Cannot wait for the next chapter! I hope it's coming soon! Good look with your education!

Please update soon!

Since Sakura and hikari have the best chakra control will they both be trained by the fifth hokage

Please update the story and soon!

You should just tag OC

I think that, instead of using big letters when you want to write a word that you mean (example, "He REALLY did it") you should write the word in italic letters, not big and bold letters. It is better that way, I reckon.
Ah, and I hope you haven't changed your mind when I suggested that you make Orochimaru touch Hikari... inappropriately... in later chapters.
A very good chapter, as always, please update more!

Your si oc is pathetic af. Kill yourself, virgin.

Ya know I dont think you made him seem too OOC. During that scene no one is talking; no flashbacks, no inner monologue, no nothing but you can tell that something is going through his mind in that instant. I think it gives an insight into what's going through Sasuke's head in that instant. Good chapter cant wait for the next one

When will Orochimaru just "happen" to kidnap Hikari? ...
Oh, and if that happens, I want him to, ah, 'violate' her personal space... and what's on the lower part of her body... [6.6]
It just makes the story more interesting.