i liked the story but its two short for my liking but i was thinking if you made it a little bit longer very one would enjoy the story ...
you could make it at least 12 chapters if you wanted to
i am only giving you an opinon
ok

Nice story idea. I just have a quick question. The scene at the beginning, where Yami heals Yugi, can I ask what inspired you to write it the way you did? Just curious.

Where did you get this idea from?

please continue

that was good, you are doing well. I am glad i could read this, and i will trust you to continue your story eventually. Please continue and liked it, bye! :)

When will there be more? Cause I really like this

A really interesting plot you have here. :)

I like it, but there's a lot of things that prevent me from enjoying it to its full potential. Since this is your first time, I think it's great!

However, if you need any help, feel free to ask! :)

Can't wait to see more.

*Ohime-Sama*

Please put up chapter 4 soon and hurry

Oh no YUGI! What's happening! What happened!?

Oh Ra! OH RA!

Cool chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.

cool chapter keep going

THANK YOU:D seriously the next chapter in my story i was having a HUGE mind block...like nothing was coming but this gave me an idea:D you have no idea what this means to me thank you:D

ANYWAY that was amazing i love it:) like seriously i love it:D i cant stop smiling:) i had a crappy day but this turned it around:D I love how Yami is...he is sooooo damn hot and caring...Yugi you are sooooo lucky:) one thing though...when a person finishes speaking you should hit enter so it becomes a different paragraph:) it will make it longer and make a ton of sense:) trust me my teachers are still on my case about it;) Anyway i love yugi toooo adorable:) great idea

OMR WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN? (dont tell me) THEY ARE ALLLLLLL GOING TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO EAT CAKE;) lol jk jk cant wait for the next chapter:D

-forever keep writing

Holy Ra this is amazing:) i dont understand how there is only 2 chapters! I love this story amazing:) OMR little mate is an adorable nickname love it:) Please update:) this totally made my day you have no idea:) hahahahaha great job what will happen next? OMR will the villagers get Yugi back or is Yugi the sacfices for Yami? What will happen? I need to know soooo update please:)

-forever keep writing

Please put up chapter 3 soon and hurry

Good flow...not to be mean or anything...please work on dialogue...some of what was being said had an awkward flow...but other than that love the chapter cannot wait for the next one! Please update soon!