Bloody hell. What a drama. You overdid it.

Harry is a fuckin pushover. tf. I was hoping for assertive Harry. Not the pushover you are giving. Really? Common. Harry shouldn't fold for Hermione and Ginny. What a whimp.

I feel like he’s gonna forgive them and that’s the last thing I want so I won’t be reading in but I absolutely love the way this is written xx

I still stand by by my earlier review. And it become utter rubbish it's too riddiculous.
Ginny is foolish, harry knows better it's done and over and still.. and then makes the mistake with gabby why trade the one for the other unbelievable..
-In all this i was wondering where is hermione? his supposed training in knight and finding clues is weird, cause he was not the smart one she is. In all she betrayed him in the end sort of. Things done and said if it is ginny or fleur etc.. hermione should be there helping him but instead now fleur is mostly there.. maybe betrayed is rather strong but still my god ron made her stupid, for what they did she now includes herself.
argh never mind..

The writing is great and i suppose i gonna try read this till the end even if it isn't finished. But those first couple of pages makes it damn hard, that i think reading it takes a while cause i have to first get it in my head.
-What a rubbish in what they say r/hr relationship.. honestly that's something that should never even started. Hermione is daft, blind, stupid etc.. to even think it, is basicly betraying harry considering what ron does. There is either a potion or spell at work or knows nothing about relationships, if her parents knew about ron they would flee the country. I know fleur is already married into the family but boy she should just run away.
-It should be h/hr for she stays a true friend, cause really what can ginny offer harry after all this time (and he's says she's above him wtf? more far below him) he developed and changed, she still fan girling. That he lost in emotions suddenly is weird.
-Hermione punches? doubtfull that isn't like her (at least draco or ron maybe)

And now I know how this story will go. This is a dumb story.

Lol. All of that bitchy Harry about Ginny and you have them as friends. Did you read a Ginny bashing fix and decide to change your story? Are you fucking kidding me. Fy

Wow. Did you read that book how to ruin a character in one chapter or less?

He turns into some huge badass with his emotions turned off and in a snap of his fingers he’s bumbling to Hermione (who betrayed him in talking to the weasleys btw) like a little bitch. Bummed out.

Harry is such a fucking ass, I don't care what you say. He's seen the worse, but he like any other person should know humans are prone to mistakes. Should they keep repeating them, that's another story. But should they make them once or twice, I think we all know deep down it happens. It takes bigger courage to face your problems than to keep running away from them. If you always run, you never will be whole again. I think that's a lesson Harry has yet to see. He runs, he ignores, and he refuses to acknowledge. And honestly I think someone needs to snap at him coldly and tell him to his face.
Harry in this comes off as a guy who too blind and hard-headed to see all he has. And until someone punches him hard with facts, he'll never see it.

love the story i can't wait till u write more

Nice work

another good one

Idk good story and all but I never liked Gabrielle like you can put who your want to put it’s your story but I hate hate hate hate hate HATE Gabrielle

This seems completely unlike the harry you made why on earth would be only connect himself to hermione and fleur not only that but I hate it when authors use ron as a way to show how powerful harry is but before hand make run seem like an average dude...in other words I disliked it which means it was probably really good...keep it up..

I am in chapter 4 and still reading. I just want to say
1. If harry thinks he is “death”- then he gives in too soon to Hermione. And I don’t like how she tries to convince him. I am suprised that he still tries to talk to someone that just slaps him.
2. Even if Harry sees that he is not dangerous, he should by all rights be mad at Ginny for not standing up to him, against Molly. After all, we talk about love, and potential marriage, her “future husband/her true love” Is important enough to stand up for, no matter the situation