mmmmm nice fic

Great story! The Jaga-Cheetara relationship is beautifully written. I love the spunk you gave Cheetara. Seeing Kaynar and Addicus as clerics made me shiver! And the twist on the King of Thundera... I didn't see that coming at all. Well done. Hope you'll be updating this one soon.

Great story! I cant wait till you write more!

This is a good story. Please continue. Cheetara and Lion-O forever.

Worlds better than the original version. Some consistencies are still present. Like we don't know the reason why the other Cat species so openly opposed Leo's idea of joining the nations and establishing peace. But outside of that very good.

Although, I have to say that with as much work as was put into this first prologue, being simply labeled a beta reader seems a lacking title. Bronwynn basically re-wrote this entire prologue made everything flow a lot smoother. But it's only a word, no big deal.

Good job, CC.

I have to agree that the "adopted" daughter/ father relationship between Jaga and Cheetara is somewhat more fitting.

Great update CC. Loved the changes. Lion-O's a senator's son instead of a prince? Cool. Now he'll truly have to "earn" it. I know you'll do a fantastic job at telling that story as well. You handle the Lichee chemistry well and the dialogue was great. Hope to read more soon. Keep rockin

Good goin, Cowboy. Keep on keepin on.

Liked the new chapter,can't wait for another

Very well done. You delivered on your promises. Two very big thumbs up.

Excellent!

I really enjoyed this!

This was how I wished they started in the NS.

Like how you have pumrya and Tygra together already.

I liked the different animal kingdoms split up.

Well you had to fit him in somehow I suppose. Good work with Grune though

Great chapter!

Nicely done! You have developed a great rapport with Lion-O and Cheetara already. Looking forward to more.

Loving the pace that things are going at. Give some but leave plenty for later. Nice combo with all the characters touched on here. Fun read overall. Until next time.

I loved the whole chapter. The big highlight is, of course, LiChee, but I enjoyed other scenes like Cheetara and Jaga (the latter explaining Cheetara's mother and birth father to her), Pumyra and Tygra, the arrivals of Addicus and Kaynar as clerics, Lion-O and Claudus acting like son and father, and of course, High Cleric Wahankh and Grune at the end. This really oughta be good.