Cool story .. nice snd refreshing after some dramatic oned

that was awesome loved it
Draco122

*shudder*

I gotta be honest, this story was ok but it could be better with more detail (and thus more chapters) rather then just summing up certain events just to rush through them like you did. Like you could have made 2 or 3 chapters per year rather then 1 or 1 and a half chapters per year and it actually would make a more decent sized story.

But as is its an ok story

Cue me slapping James

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The Hoygyoku used as a mere Christmas gift. DeAd

Very nice, good wrap up to the story.

I read Shinobi's Lament and was interested in your other work.
Oh god, my eyes, they burn. Please rewrite this. Your talent as a writer has grown by leaps and bounds since this story.
Right now if you have a skill of 9/10, then back then when this story was written, you had a skill of 5/10.
I love the idea though. Thanks for sharing.

Great story I really liked it a lot good job writing the story.

My eyes hurt reading this. Why aren't you using "Hello" instead of -Hello-? And everything goes to fast without much introspection, it feels more like a administrational report than a story.

Interesting idea and plot and chapter

Good plot, but the format confuses me.

If the boggart turned into three corpses, then who was the third and why did it only say Tracy's and Daphne's

wow short story but interesting