Ok at best. But needs a lot of work. It flow/pacing feels wrong or off. Mind reading or going inside Naruto head is a big NO NO. he has a big mean 9 tails fox that stops that. The seal only protects Naruto mind. Anyone else the fox will have free to do what ever on. Sasuke was only able to due to his eyes but had that been any else the fox could and would have killed. Mind readers still have to enter the mind to read it.

shit

It's a bit ironic that Deadpool ended up killing the fic. Hopefully the story has a healing factor... I was enjoying this quite a bit, and you haven't even gotten through a lot of huge marvel stories (except for Spiderman I guess). X-Men is one of my favorite stories that Marvel produces, so even better.

So, yes last chapter was not great and I understand that Naruto is weak because he hasn't received ANY training. This I understood and rather I liked the fact that he was made weak, it helped progress your plot.

My problem however is after reading chapter 5... Like every other cliche fanfic out there about MARVEL, you also went the route of 'MC displays op power - villains think that they can use this power for themselves so lets get him and derive everything from his blood' ...

Honestly the power that Naruto has would never work for any HUMAN in the marvel universe, MOSTLY because NARUTO don't even know how his powers work. The other fact is that ANY blood from shinobi from Naruto universe cannot be replicated by meer humans, Marvel Universe or not. They- and by this I mean shinobi- got their power from Kaguya and her descendants, Kaguya gaining her powers from the juubi or God-Tree by eating it's fruit. Hagoromo who is Kaguya's son was only able to spread chakra to everything and everyone because his mother was able to gift him the gift of chakra. So what does that mean? If the human isn't from Shinobi world then there's NO WAY that chakra can be replicated WHATSOEVER!. Blood work will not enable some to just magically obtain chakra powers. DNA will not just let someone obtain Chakra powers. THE SHINOBI WAS BORN WITH CHAKRA!. Third reason why they can't access chakra in MARVEL UNIVERSE, Chakra is the culmination of BOTH physical and spiritual energies. Meaning that even if you in your fanfic somehow allowed them to obtain a way to use chakra from blood (which is wrong no matter what ) they would only be able to access physical energies and not spiritual energies. No matter what experiment he has done, without a spiritual way to obtain the information from naruto( who by the way still is an idiot ) they can't ever produce chakra.

Now that I went on a rant to explain some stuff about chakra, let's go to one point in this chapter that is REALLY bugging me. No it's not the fact that he couldn't escape or the fact that Hydra got to him before S.H.I.E.L.D or that with the amount of strangeness he has displayed NO ONE thought he was strange. It was that you thought KURAMA THE FUCKING KYUUBI would allow someone to mess with it's HOST's mind and read memories that would put BOTH him and his host in danger.

All I can say to this was, "You Done Goofed".

This is a new world. Something huge has happened to it's host and you've basically stated that he was warped from his dimension to this one. Still you expect that the greatest bijuu would still be relaxing in a seal ( that would most probably would not hold a transfer from a different dimension ) and let his host be invaded?. Yeah I doubt that.

Frankly the mentioning of Naruto's chakra to anyone but someone who has knowledge of it should not be possible. The last chapters I don't have a problem with. Let Naruto be shown as weak, let him fight against foes much tougher than him. The only problem I have with this is you're letting people figure out his powers A LOT easier than ANYONE. Even in the Naruto Universe the civilians there could not use chakra because they HAD NO WAY TO LEARN ABOUT IT save for joining the shinobi forces. Just doing a blood work experiment on someone who can use chakra when you don't even know how to use that energy is impossible.

Deadpool mtf

Starting a mutant civilization? Like in gifted

Kyuubi? When we getting to that?

Great to see a non-over powered Naruto in this genre

When will we find out what age Nary currently is? Also, seems like you've tied a lot of spideys story into this

Nice slow development

Hope that plot isn't that kyuubi stays in the old Naruto world ...that'll be lame.

I like the smokescreen technique

Only critiiis Naruto using the words: "several" and "perpendicular"

Interesting

Poor plot with retarded canon Naruto. This isnt manga for 12 year olds, such a protagonist isnt compelling.

Also, Naruto appeared without clothes, yet he had ryo to try and pay for clothes? Did he pull the money out of his ass?