So cute!

LOVE

Loved it. Nice story.

I loved it. More, please write more.

No need to apologize! The wait was worth it! I love Erik and Christine, they're just so cute, although Erik would probably not appreciate being referred to in the same sentence as "cute". I can't wait to see what happens to them on their trip, and how Raoul will interfere. If I can make a suggestion, when a new person speaks, their dialogue should be in a new paragraph. So if Erik says something to Christine and she responds, her response should begin a new paragraph. It's nice to see Christine thinking up plans instead of waiting for someone to tell her what to do. Lovely work! Can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Don't worry about the update wait, this chapter was great! I really enjoyed reading it, especially the beginning with Christine's thoughts and Erik's nightmare. Nice touch. I'm really liking the characterisation of Christine by the way!

Aww! I loved this chapter, but disagree on what Christine said about Erik's attire. I LOVE it, but that's just me xD

The feeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee eeels. I love this! Yay.
Your Obedient Reader,
O.G.

I'm loving this so far! I love how you've kept the POV switching to a minimum, only doing it when nessessary:) I also love the little realisation Erik has whilst tending to Christine's feet about the fact that he is no longer the haunting spectre and guiding voice to her and must stride to become something more. It's well written so far, hardly any grammer or spelling mistakes(except for the spelling of Erik's name in the first chapter;) but I will forgive and forget(: ) update soon!

My dear max-rose-clary,

I like the direction your story is taking and no worries on your Erik error. Spelling is minor, if you stick to character, even sticklers for grammar will forgive you.

I think you have managed to capture a softer side of our beloved Phantom, yet I also see the extremes in mood that make him so unpredictable. I found the washing of Christine's feet to be almost Biblical (not sure if you intended that) but it seemed to illustrate how Erik believes himself unworthy (even though the task was necessary). I really enjoyed that scene.

I will admit the descriptions of his cutting her foot actually made me wince. That's wonderful, I like reacting to reading, makes it so much more enjoyable. I am curious to see how this story will progress. Is Erik the antagonist? Is Raoul? So many questions! :)

I think this first story is really nice. I admire that you are writing from 1st person POV, something I actually have a great deal of trouble doing.

One quick question, do you currently have a BETA (please pm to respond if you don't mind).

Much love and great start,

bo-leigh bella

That was so amazing! I loved the emotions that the story held.

First of all, I would like to say I love your idea! Very creative! I'm surprised I haven't heard of someone writing a story like this before. It's well written, and everyone seems to be in character, with Erik putting Christine before himself, though not completely forgetting his anger, and Christine knowing that she has to be brave to make him believe she wants to be with him, after all that has happened. Erik's name is spelled with a 'k', and that's mainly the only thing I noticed. I would suggest looking for a beta, not because you're writing is bad, on the contrary it is very good, but it would help you with a bit of grammar and phrasing issues, nothing huge :) This is pretty much exactly how I wish the ending of Phantom had gone. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
P.s. I agree with Erik's opinion of Raoul's stupidity of running after Christine without a plan or method of defence. It was all with good intentions, it just wasn't very bright :P

Good story, but his name is spelled Erik.