Awwwwwwww this was worth the 2 days I spent reading this

Ok, sorry, have to say this. Why is Gray so special? I honestly think Natsu would be number 1! After all, he is one of the main protagonists alongside Lucy and Happy! Well, mostly Lucy. I love Gratsu, however, Natsu comes first in my opinion.

i only just found your story, BUT I LOVED IT SSSOOOO MUCH! XD
i literally binge-read it for like two hours ;) and I love how you reply to reviews through your story and I really enjoyed reading them

To answer your questions (even if it's too late XD)
I really did enjoy your story, although you could probably do what I do, read over them and/or get someone else to read over them as well just to make sure there's no spelling mistakes and that everything makes sense, other than that it was AMAZING!
My favourite character would have to be Natsu... Or Gray's mum she was hilarious XD
I kinda hope Happy got a little more of an appearance, but that would probably ruin the plot hey? Either way, you wrote about happy really well and you made him SSSOOOO CUTE!
No I didn't cry, but I got pretty close, I feel so sorry for Gray and Natsu having to put up with fathers like them :'(
Sorry am I blabbing on too much XD lol
I will DEFINITELY read more of your Gratsu stories (they are my favourite pairing ;) )

BYE!

, hr

Cute story! I really enjoyed it! You did a really good job with it all. I wish there was more! haha Great job! :)

-Yvonne

This is so amazing I can't stop reading it!

o my gosh i cried! that was the greatest story ive read so far loved it ur awsome!P.S ur answers o and also ive read A LOT of stories and that was the best! my favorite character was natsu AND gray cant decide :p rest of ur questions YES

u meanie natsu dose nothing so he dos not need to be hurt k sad panda xxxxxx

because his girl friend was hit by a car after defending natsu from lacsis and gajeel and she comes back as a ghost in their dreams and gray falls for natsu hard and that it is all yaoi mageic

MY best:Haruuuuuuu

u did not want it 2 end just admit it I knew i did not xxxxx

nothing nothing he will do nothing t natu or if ay ere not socute thay will fall in love love I tell u love !

killlll them

he comes back 2 save natsu xxxx grate and I will kill them for being mean o natsu xxxxxx

Hi! My name is Running Lynx. I've read the most recent page of your reviews, and I think that after hearing so much praise, my review might hurt you because my review is not going to praise this story much. Sorry, but I will tell you my honest opinion. Better to hear truth and improve than live in ignorance of mistakes, right?
This story was very interesting - in the beginning. Now I'm reading chapter 23 and I feel as if this story could have been finished already. Gray and Natsu admitted their feelings to each other, and Natsu agreed to go out with Gray. Hate is over. This chapter felt like a filling - yes, there are side threads about their dads, Happy and what not, but no one is actively trying to keep Gray and Natsu apart. It feels like a happy ending right here. I am stopping reading this story here because I have stopped worrying about Gray rejecting Natsu or not getting over Jamie. They have supportive friends and Gray's mom is also supportive. So, I believe Natsu and Gray will get over whatever their dads, bullies or even entire school might say about their relationship, because they have each other and their supportive people. Next time, try to put obstacles in their relationship more frequently so that they never truly stop trying to figure out how to be together.
Some parts of this I really liked. All of the bullying scenes were good. I could picture real damage going on. Great work instilling that sense of realism and that people need time to recover.
Things that bothered me were that they went to sleep early an awful lot. I know I hardly went to bed early when I was at school. Maybe they didn't go to sleep early that many times, but I got that impression anyway after reading the sentences which indicated that they fell asleep in what felt like every chapter. Go easy on how frequently you sent them to bed.
I think that all characters in this are way too open with each other. Natsu and Gray are boys. Would they really tell their moms who beat them up? I'd think they'd try to shrug it off "It's nothing." Even if their moms pressed, does it really matter who beat them up? Their moms wouldn't be able to do much but worry. "Don't worry mom, I won't let them walk all over me next time." The only time when I think it would have been ok for Natsu to tell his mom is when Gray punched him, because his mom was already worried that Gray might do that. If you want Natsu to confess to his family about Laxus to show that his dad didn't believe Natsu, then still you could have had Natsu quiet, only for his dad to accuse him the next evening that he heard from his business partner that Natsu attacked their sons. I just feel that Natsu and Gray would have their pride and keep quiet and stubborn about who hurt them. They would tell to trusted friends though. That's what friends are for.
Next, there were so many thunderstorms! Like, a lot! I know that you are having them to play on Gray's fears, but seriously, whenever something important is about to happen, it also happens to thunderstorm. It gets repetitive after a while. I began to think "oh, another thunderstorm. How convenient to have it strike right at that important instance." I don't know where you live, but where I live we have a thunderstorm maybe once in a month, but it feels even less than that. In any case, I think it is considered a rare event, and you should treat it as such. If thunderstorms are frequent in their region, you should have stated so and why. Maybe it was spring or autumn, the thunderstorm season?
The dreams. Don't have me started on dreams. I felt like too much depended on the dreams. Dreams are just dreams. They can get really distorted. I don't think dreams are a good way to communicate the past. I sure got frustrated when reading dreams. They dream a lot and right when it is important and they take their dreams so seriously. Also, after most dreams, except the kissing ones, I don't think we got to see how the characters got to react to them. Did Gray wake up in cold sweat and panting from feelings of loss/despair? Anyway, I feel like you are cheating us by showing the past in dreams - how do we know we are seeing the truth? It is also the lazy easy way out - the characters are unconscious and that kinda makes it less intense, because they can't help what they see. It would have been far more dramatic if Natsu and Gray remembered all that while being fully awake - memories like those would evoke strong emotions in them, and strong emotions make people do unpredictable things. Don't be lazy next time and make the past into fully realised flashbacks and show how they feel after remembering the painful past.
Next, which is more of a technical note, please, I beg you, give each new person speaking a separate paragraph. Don't dump all people's dialogue into a single paragraph. It is super confusing when you don't separate who is speaking. Here's an example of what I mean:
Bad version:
About ten minutes later the cupboard opened and we got out. "So you guys made up!?" Lucy said smiling. "Yeah, we did I guess I wa-" Push! "Ow!" Natsu and I shouted holding our foreheads again. I turned around and glared at Erza. "I uh, had to get revenge on Natsu for saying the spider was in my hair." Erza said laughing awkwardly.
So many people speaking at once! So confusing!
Better version:
About ten minutes later the cupboard opened and we got out.
"So you guys made up!?" Lucy said smiling.
"Yeah, we did I guess I wa-"
Push!
"Ow!" Natsu and I shouted holding our foreheads again. I turned around and glared at Erza.
"I uh, had to get revenge on Natsu for saying the spider was in my hair." Erza said laughing awkwardly.
See, new line for each speaker. It reads better too, because more white space around the words is easy on the eyes, while a huge paragraph usually indicates a heavy read.
Next...I found that much about this story is about nothing important. I mean that you have diluted your story so much that a lot of the time we are reading about the mundane. I had began to skip-read (that is, not reading every word, but rather searching for key words or just reading dialogue and skipping non-dialogue altogether) because you failed to keep my attention. Everything that wasn't Natsu and Gray dealing with each other was boring. Very often I found myself thinking 'author, just get to the point!'. You are slow to get to the point. Things like Natsu seeing Lucy study for once - who cares how she studies? That part when Natsu was bored and started to crawl everywhere - who cares? It was amusing for a second - but no more than a second. Then, whenever anyone got bored and just sat in their seats stating how bored they were - well, I was bored reading about them being bored! Get on with the story and get us to the important parts, which are Gray and Natsu dealing with each other.
Then, I feel that all Natsu/Gray encounters were not intense enough. Natsu is scared of Gray, right? I didn't get the sense of Natsu's true nervousness, or his true love - Natsu didn't sweat or pale that much. The only times that stood out when Natsu was nervous was when he hid behind Erza. I just think that you should have made Natsu a bit more fearful and hyper-aware of Gray. You could have made Natsu freeze in shock each time Gray was near. Next time, take the opportunity to add drama and play up on Natsu and Gray's feelings. Whenever Natsu is nervous, make him super nervous that he can't breathe. When Gray is mad, make him murderous and crush his desk. Make everything more intense.
Gray forgave Natsu far too easily! Their fight was stopped by a thunderstorm (go figure), and the next day Gray wasn't even resentful towards Natsu when he thanked him. I thought Gray would be humiliated just a little bit and would at least glare at Natsu, hating him for seeing Gray so weak. And after that, Gray stopped hating Natsu at all. Gray didn't even accept that it wasn't Natsu's fault yet! The hate just evaporated! You should have included Gray's reflection on the past, his internal debate whether what Natsu had said to him was true, and Gray's rationale that led him to forgive Natsu. The sudden way that Gray just stopped hating Natsu without an explanation was confusing.
I could analyse this story more but I am too tired and sleepy to do so. I can do a chapter-by-chapter analysis for you if you want, to point out chapter-by-chapter where you could have improved. I am too tired to do that right now, but I am willing to do that if you request that of me. Just reply back and say that you'd like me to do a full analysis or a no thanks. I like to see stories improve, and I am wishing nothing but the best for your story.
Once again, I apologise if this review feels like a smack in the face for you. I do not mean to harm in any way. I only wish to point out areas that could use improvement.
Have a great day,
Running Lynx