I like this story!

They make an epic shipping «33
and this FF was epic too! xD

Nice, really nice

nice

PLEASE WRITE MORE! :D

Hello there,

First thing I would like to say is you have a very solid ability to write in first person. I have read quite a few of them and not many write the perspective as well as you have. Now onto the plot of the story. So far it just doesn't seem to have a ton to it yet. Kallen gets injured in battle, Lelouch blames himself for this while coming to understand his feeling for his injured pilot. Now I have to wonder how long you plan on making this story as right now if its only going to be a few more chapters then obviously a little back story (battle scene?) with a happy ending is going to come. However if you plan on making this a longer story you will have to come up with a bigger plot or find a spot in R2 to fit this.

Either way you have written a solid beginning and I look forward to reading more.

-CJ

Very nice, very nice indeed, keep up the good work.

This story is really sweet in the sence that Lelouch would stay by her side like this :) it's so cute! Can't wait to read more :)

I think Kallen was vary in caricature. Much more so then most of the fics Ive sean. keep up the good work

I love the way this is written! Its rare to find a code geass fanfic with only lelouchs pov. Its also interesting as to how you handle his pov. I'm curious as to how kallen got hurt and why? also the way you handle oughi is really surprising and I like it a lot. I think it shows that he does have some courage. Good Work!

Wow... This is one surprise after another. I'm so happy that you let kallen know who lelouch is, if didn't it might have got a little weird if kallen woke up and zero was there. Anyways I'm wondering who's on the other side of the door? I think it'd be great if it were oughi, since he already knows that lelouch loves kallen.

Novice writer to novice writer here i reckon your doing well, the story plot is a bit empty as i have no fucking clue what is happening. I do like that Kallen and Lelouch are together in a sense, you seem to have first person writing and grammer down to the tee, and your adjectives are creative as they are plentiful, i would very much like to read more of your story. Not to be an ass though and i know writing is really not easy but if you could increase the chapter size pretty please. its like your feeding us nibbles of the story, and i really really want to eat more then a nibble of this story at a time.

I'm surprised by this! I love the way you handled Oughi and Lelouch I'm also curious as to how Kallen got hurt I the first place and why. Good Work!

This is something to look forward to.

Welcome to and may I say that this is an excellent start. Keep it up.