Beautiful.

Wonderfully thought-provoking.

Oh, this is marvelous. Yes, counting makes sense, and then it takes over. Auntie Luna is the best!

This was simply beautiful. Thank you!

Aw, this was a great one-shot. The flow was very natural and fit well with Lily Luna's age,and I loved all of the descriptions, especially Luna's house and her relationship with Luna, and of course how great of a job you do describing the OCD-like symptoms Lily Luna has.

This was amazing :) Let me tell you as a person who Is diagnosed with OCD You handled this so well I wonder If you have OCD Yourself? I love how you kept the theme of counting, and I caught the times where she had to repeat herself three times :) That was brilliant narrative. If I ever wanted an outsider to know what OCD Was like I would show them this :) My first story I ever wrote was about Hermione having OCD.

Anyways, the spelling and grammer was perfect! :)

Ooh this is interesting! I love seeing little character studies, espeically of next gen. I love how you explored the effects a miscarriage could have on someone outside the immediate family, and on someone so young. I like the idea that Lily counted everyone and that she thought numbers were safe. Developing what i presume to be OCD as a reaction to what happend to Fleur was interesting, i never really would have associted the two but in this context, with the counting, it makes sense.
I love that it was Luna who helped Lily through it, because she didn;t judge or get angry or make Lily feel unsafe she just listened and understood and never once treated Lily like a freak or someone who was ill. I love how you explored their relationship.
Beautiful job!

Wait this was really nice.

I like how you incorporated her childhood motivation for the counting and how it gradually escalates. It makes it very believable and heartwrenching. I also love how Luna is the one to help Lily out of the counting. :) Its adorable.

Wow, this is a powerful exploration of OCD! I really like how it started when Lily was very young and had limited understanding and coping ability and then took on a life of its own, especially with the multiplying. Of course Luna would be someone accepting Lily could talk to, and I especially liked the bit about Luna not saying Kitty would count for her because Luna knew that Lily knew that she was just a doll. That's so Luna to acknowledge the intelligence of a child and how they know what's not make-believe even as they're talking about something abstract. You did a great job making Lily sympathetic and not weird as I found myself worrying about her family too! Harry and Ginny trying to help her but not being able to understand seemed very realistic to me, and my favorite bit is how she doesn't get angry with Roxanne calling her "mad"-it shows how very far Lily has come. Wonderful writing!

I think the thing I like the most about this story is with the counting and how Lily has some safe numbers and some numbers that aren't so safe, because that's how I am, even numbers are safe, and numbers that end in five are safe, and very occasionally going by seven's is safe, only not really because seven is an odd number and odd numbers aren't safe at all, and...

...I'm rambling more than Lily Luna was doing, aren't I. Oops. Anyway. This is brilliant and spot-on and I love how Luna's the one who understands and helps her out. That part was lovely, and all of it was, up to the end really! I love it very much.

First off, let me start by saying that this was absolutely amazing.

You really managed to get inside Lily Luna's head and showed how the counting influenced her; how it first made everything easier and better and safer (counting how many family members there were for lunch) but then became complicated and compulsive. It's interesting to see how she rationalises everything and how some numbers felt safer to her than others.
I think you've got the OCD spot on.

Normally, I'd say long run-on sentences are something to avoid at all costs, but you've used it to your advantage here and it worked really well. It felt like was really witnessing the 'stream-of-consciousness' of young child, the way she just rambles on and on and on.

I absolutely love the fact that it's Luna who understands her. I would have expected a bit more involvement from her parents, but the bonding with Luna was great and I can totally picture Luna offering advice and calming her down, she has kept her oddity, but she has always matured. I like the way she introduced Kitty to Lily and how in the end that actually helped her (when therapy had failed).

Great job!

Oh, how wonderful! I really enjoyed this! I absolutely love when people write a good characterization for Luna and you definitely hit the mark with this one. I know I should be talking about the main character, but I adore Luna's sensible intuition, when it neither intrudes nor judges. She would be a remarkable therapist and it is nice to see that she was trusted to do a bit of counseling for Lily.

At first, I was not particularly sold on the style of the narrative. Long run-on sentences can be tiring and monotonous to read. It worked well for this story because of the subject matter. Streams of consciousness lend themselves to it. "Rationalizing" OCD behavior tend to also be written similarly. But I would strongly advise you to avoid it in other works. By and large, it doesn't make for compelling writing.

I adored this story. I was interested in a child's struggle to maintain control in a world that seems oblivious to any attempts to prevent danger. I was interested in a very different perspective on this character. Good job, a very enjoyable read!

This was interesting. I've seen a lot of Lily Luna fics, but I haven't seen one quiet like this. Having OCD seems very difficult and I think you portrayed that well. I'm not exactly sure how easily it is to get over, but I would imagine that it is easier to overcome when you are younger verses when you are older and have been doing it a lot longer.

The inclusion of Luna was lovely. I love Luna's character and I do believe that she would be able to notice something like this and would want to help.

My only issue is that you started far too many sentences with "and" for my liking and that there was a lot of run-on sentences. I can kind of see why they are necessary since it shows how bothersome OCD can be but I started to get really frustrated by them by the end of the story.

But overall, I liked this. Good job.

I just love this fic, so I'm afraid I don't have much to offer in the way of constructive criticism!

Lily's voice is so well done, not a single line rings false.

I just noticed that almost all paragraphs start with 'And', which is lovely – it really makes me hear it in the voice of a little girl who has to stop for breath, before going 'And then-' gulping out the next bit. It's accentuated by the long sentences as well.

It was brilliant to see Luna and her particular brand of intuition being brought in too to help her namesake – the characterisation of her through Lily's eyes was very true to the books.

Another thing you conveyed very well was Lily's increasing distress when the counting doesn't soothe her anymore – the tone gets more and more frantic. Now that I read back I think you used repetition to do that: 'she had to count, she had to, she had to'. It works very well.

Actually, as I was reading it struck me that Lily's parents' experiences may well have had an effect on her – compare the children of Holocaust survivors for example. Most adults she would know would have had deeply traumatic experiences before and during the war – Ginny and Harry actually being the worst affected. Somehow the wizarding world doesn't seem to be a place where PTSD would be diagnosed and treated, so it would be eminently plausible that what they had been through would linger in the background of their family life.

So anyway – just lovely, really. That's all :)

This is beautifully written. This is a tough subject to write about authentically and you did such a great job with it. The way you wrote it from Lily's perspective was fantastic and I could totally get into her head and understand her thought process.
OCD can be difficult to explain because it doesn't make logical sense to most people. But your reasoning behind why Lily counted and the way she justified it was so perfect. And a bit sad as well. I felt almost stressed out for her while I was reading it.
Having Aunt Luna help her was beautiful. She would definitely be a cool aunt and I love the way she handled the situation. It was so in character and the bonding between them was really sweet. And overall, this was very well done. Great job! :D