Well written.

this was great!

It's interesting to read a precursor-to-millennia-of-waiting fic. I mean, how many fics cover Arthur's return itself? But this is the first I've read that has Merlin understanding that and coming to terms with it during Arthur's first life. Very interesting, very moving. Thank you!

It's a deep,painful story but still,it has it's sweetness...
But the actual ending of Merlin just makes reading this more painful...TT_TT

Poor Merlin!

It felt to me like it was still in the middle and cut short but I did enjoy it up to there

Shoot I wrote merlin as Arthur's slave when I meant servant, oops. Just realized that...
*blushes embarrassedly*
Anywho...
Well ya, living forever all alone... The thought is frightening, and def lonely. Poor merlin *sighs*

I just started reading this when I reached a point that bugged me. Big time.
Every season (TV show) is equivalent to a year, but the gap between a season and the next is also a year and that also counts.
So truth be told, there may have been five seasons but merlin was basically Arthur's slave for 10 years.. Unless otherwise told which wasn't.
So if I'm guessing this tone season five then merlin had been Arthur's servant for 10 years, not five.
Sorry just had to point that out, I normally don't point out mistakes Cuz they're usually understandable but this one kinda got to me.
Now. To continue reading this now that I finished pointing that out ;)

I'm back! I really liked your pacing, it didn't feel like things were really rushing. I liked your Samhain idea, very ingenious. The foreshadowing was legendary in terms of presentation. Well done.

Hi! I am really enjoying this, and I promise to leave a better commentor the end. But I really like this idea that there was foreshadowing and tha maybe Merlin even figured it out himself. My only co verb is that you switched verb tenses near the end of ch 2 and it throws me off.

Two words...I'm crying!

I like your take on this scenario. I've never seen it done before, and it's an interesting concept. Merlin's reaction felt very realistic considering the circumstances, and I like the way you tied in the Dorocha. Good luck with your future writing and God bless!

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