No smut. Useless "M" rated fic.

This...really.. really should have been run through spell check good god. The word Slitted has yet to be correct, I'm looking at the word jinurincans, and verbs just toss a die and pick a random -tense

I honestly believe you should commission someone to write a reaction fic to this story. In my opinion it’s among the best if not the best completed Naruto Fan fictions, however like everything that has an ending, it eventually goes into obscurity, and others miss the chance to enjoy reading it. It’s why remakes exist, however this story needs no remake, but what could make it great again is a reaction fic.

I’m no author so I can’t really complain if you don’t do this, but I really wish this had a reaction fic with the cast of Naruto watching these events play out.

Seems I was mistaken but it still came off like that. It just sounded weird during the talk. No sakura is sasuke. No ino was with Sai for 10 dates 2 fricken years ago. Then he directly says hinatas hot as hell and has the best body but he just doesnt see her that way when she is STILL seeking him and only him out and single. Yet still eye humping sakura and even ino.

Ffs..

The bit with hinata really came off nonsensical. Basically just seems the author doesnt like hinata and just randomly put that as a stopper saying no they wont be together.

Ok shot in the dark, have you ever thought oh making a Reaction Story to this story. What I mean is a story where the characters of the canon universe react to whatever story is presented.

This story is awesome, and the idea of the main cast reacting to it would be an even better read. This is just a suggestion but it's something to look into if you ever just want to come back and reintroduce this story to everyone.

This has to be one of if not the best story I've read in a long time.

This is got to be one of my Favourite story’s I ever read

I binge read this in a week. Loved the concepts. Have you ever read a series called "Wheel of Time" by Robert Jordan? There are so many parallels here. Which is great for me since that is one of my favorite series of all time

the premise is really good but damn the grammer is killing me

can't really understand why change his namikaze

this is full of the mistakes but i'll give it a try

I just finished this chapter and I have to say I am very impressed. I have been reading FanFiction for around 8 years now and I have to say your story is pretty high up there. If you got someone to just go through and fix grammar and repeated words I think this story would be very good. The only thing I would change if this went through a rewrite is that to make it more mature and add more Jutsus. I believe the story only had about 6 instances of a technique being used.

Why does this say mature? Not worth reading really.

Not sure why writers like to refer to tailed beasts as demons :/ they're beasts