Bravo molto bello

Even if Rizzles wasn't endame thank u very much for finishing the story. It was still full of cute rizzle and other moments and a very good story :) You write very well and I hope u will consider continue writing, maybe a sequel? x) Thx again for making the effort of finishing the story and gl for w.e u devide to do

Don't write a sequel. The story was okay until the whole shooting thing because it didn't have much to do with the rest of what was going on. You need to be careful of switching between first and third person (you did this a bit in the first couple of chapters) - it's really bad style. Also avoid changing between character's pov because it makes the story seem unpolished. If you don't feel you can get across the story with one character's first person pov, write in third person...then there is more lenience to what you can convey to the audience (e.g. In Jane's pov she may not notice some things that happen, but as third person narrator you can point them out without the character needing to notice them).

Sorry about my last post..I misread the intro...Ch 14 Reviews were 25..
I hope you continue...would like to see how you bring Jane thru her recovery and handle the school shooting.

Reader from USA

I cant believe that it ended here...I thought there was suppose to be 25 chapters?
Well, now what was a very good story has just turned into a mess.

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I think if I had a friend like Maura that was always spouting off factual information, it would drive me crazy but like Jane, if I really liked that friend, I could put up with it.
I always wished I was smarter and I probably could have been but as mush as I wanted to be smarter, I hated studying...I got by. Now I regret that I was happy just to get by.
It's good to see Jane & Maura interact..

Wasnt expecting to see Jane hurt..I thought, oh good, they are getting to safety..but..you fooled us!
Very exciting!

Wow..this was a surprise! Very exciting story!

Jane is being so sweet to Maura..I cant wait til she starts attacking those cheerleaders. Their not going to know what hit thme Im sure!

In the 1st two chapters, you have Frost cursing, this chapter you have Jane cursing. is this going to be the pattern throughout? Mild words so far but Im sure they will get worse as the chapters progress.
Jane can be tough without the foul language. You arent the only writer, most of them seem to think it is a must to get a point across..
I do like the story so far. I imagine this is pretty much how Jane was in school...looking forward to reading more!

Great chapter! I love Maura in this. I hope you continue.

Very good, please update soon!

Great! Please try to write soon :)

Can't wait to read what happened to Jane, please update soon :)