This is so great! It's written like an actual episode of Buffy, and the ending of chapter 5...please continue! The suspense is killing me!

Cool story but slayers can dodge bullets buffy at normal slayer level has even new slayers check the comics.

Good four chapters.

This was so much fun to read! You captured everyone's character perfectly. I loved all the dialogue. I had forgotten how funny the mayor is. Please write more! I need to know what happens next!

Great story, I love it! Wesley says no instead of know, and a few lines after that there are missing quotation marks in Buffy's dialogue. Other than that it's perfect.

Nice! Liking it so far! Nothing to complain about from me!

i cant wait for the next chapter so please write soon

Gotta be honest this was a good chapter.
The fight scene was good, a bit brief but this early in the story that's probably the best.

You do write better than a lot of the people on this site, and i'm glad you wrote a longer chapter this time (could still be longer but still decent lenght)

Also dick's conversation with Bruce was amusing

As for tips:

don't rush the story take time to explore a situation.

Give us at least some idea about what the characters are feeling or else some of the dialoge can seem a bit forced or unlogical, not saying you need to share every single thought sometimes mystery is better, but remember that the reafers can't see into your head

When you write dialouge imagine the characters saying the lines to make it sounds like something they would say (you're allready pretty good at this but still)

I would also suggest you read some fight scenes in other fics because i know they can be hard to write, and you could also use words such as uppercut, roundhouse kick and headbutt on occasion to make a clearer picture of the fight

And last but not least it might be a good idea to have someone read a chapter before posting it (a second pair of eyes can really help sometimes)

Sorry if this felt pushy or anything, i hope you can use this but i'm not exactly a published writer so if you feel like giving me the finger and do whatever you want to do thats fine :)

PS sorry for taking so long to respond but better late than never eh?

I like the idea and your writing is pretty good
Hard to say if it will be a Good story or not but i guess we'll see .

(Might wanna think about making the chapters longer)

This is a wonderful story! Concept? Great! Execution? Brilliant! Do I want to read more? Indeed I do! I have marked this as a favorite story.

Very nice.