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Now that you have a beta the story is much more enjoyable. You may want to go back and fix chapter 3 and 4. This is my third time trying to read this story. Because of his bad the earlier chapter we're I stopped reading bit decided to try and push through it since the plot intrigued me. I'm really glad I did.

This is a very good plot. Yes, there are mistakes but if you want a beta I could help you. But really all you need to do is download Grammarly. It's a grammar app that helps with spelling and punctuation it would greatly help your story and make it more enjoyable to read.

Love it!

sorry about commenting on your spelling. it's a good story and very compelling and i'm enjoying it very much. thanks for taking the time to write this.

i am enjoying your story immensely but it's hard to read with all the boo boos. it's coven not convent. there are several others. could you maybe re read it and correct it?

in tge first chap the note said Izzy was 3 mths old, now jazz is saying the note said she's almost a year old?,

so jazz is now calling Izzy Bella?
Just wondering why it took Em 12 years to contact Jazz and how they suddenly got histo call?

The new chapter is fantastic I like it

Just like I thought! You forgot to crown jasper. You had them ask him to be a ruler but you forgot and made it all about Izzy. Seriously that ruined it for me.

Jasper is not a king? It’s almost like Bella is queen and jaspers just backup. He’s always holding her back! Well she’s a newborn so maybe just emotionally out of control. All this running hugging and crying is getting a little old...
She’s really getting on my last nerve but considering she’s not really done much for the vampire world and walks in on king meeting it may be obvious he is rightfully handling things. All she has to rule with is a good heart and a bit of power. Jasper should not be submitting to her.

I have to reply to Silversimon. There are misspelled words and grammatical errors in every paragraph. There is very little consistency throughout the story. I don’t mean to be harsh, but I found myself wondering what this author’s first language was.

I think Jasper's POV should say 1993* and not 1992. That way it would make sense that Bella was born in December, 1992 and then In March, 1993 , Jasper would've found her. Making Izzy roughly 3-4 months old. Pardon me if I'm overstepping here, just trying to be helpful.

That would still mean that Jasper found her before she was born. If Jasper found her in March 1992 and she was born in December 1992

I am confused. In chapter 19 you said Jacob had imprinted on Jessica Stanley, in this chapter you have Jacob imprinting on Leah. Did I miss something.