Great job with this chapter. I really enjoyed it. Then again, I love pretty much everything about your Dragon Age stories to the point that I talk to the screen when reading reviews by people who say a certain character I like is arrogant or stupid or something as if I was speaking to those people and tell them "Your opinion is wrong." over and over again.

I love Varric's comment about foreshadowing. I never really noticed that but, looking back, that bullshit with Bitchtrice (I hate her if you couldn't tell) is awfully ominous and does give you a sense that things with the Qunari are probably going to go to hell in the future.

Fantastic story! Thanks.

That was simply amazing and thoroughly detailed. Can't believe I wasn't eager to read this before. This has also been the very first time I have contemplated making my Hawke a blood mage. Good job on getting rid of my stereotyping for them. All the detail and looking into the other route options has really cleared up the story for me too. LOVE THIS. Thank you for taking all the time you did researching as much as you did to write this.

Completely love how the fight didn't seem like a "the end" type senario like everyone writes. Just a Viscount trying her hardest to save and keep everyone standing together. I nearlly died laughing at the Twin's "WHEN DID THAT HAPPEN!?" OMG major lol. I adore how Althea always left a moment open for people to change their mind and I never liked Orsino's choice in the end but You have made it sound completely more reasonable. I LOVE this big finale battle more than how anyone ellse could have possibly explained it! Esspecially cause she did need her friends and she acknowledged it. SQUEEEE! :3

This chapter was very enjoyable. I liked that Fenris and Hawke sweet time together. :3 wait! We can actually read one of Varric's books!? *goes to read it on wiki*

-Yay! Thank you for letting me know. I laughed at everyone's obvious appearance in the story. Interesting that Donnic is the main character though isn't it? And that Donnic goes to Fenris's house for games and guy time? Perhaps Donnic is more intergrated with the group than we realise. Anyway, great part in story! And thx again! Hehe

Love how she slaughtered them all. looks like she's finally had enough. I wondered if anoyone in the crowd would have gotten hurt, glad she saved him! Whew! Oh and now that i think about it, maybe a huge reason no one halls Hawke off to the gallows. Is Bcause the Arishok says "we will return". Kirkwall would need their defender any moment. Good job on the battle scene.

As my mom just died on the 3rd, this chapter really resonates with me. Varric's "You just gain the ability to go a few more hours without breaking down." And Aveline's "No one chooses how you mourn, It's your choice." Were both sooo deeply true and comforting i nearly cried. I started reading your story in January and could never have guessed to find such needed words. I also felt a bit sweety-sourly touched when Hawke is sitting like her mother for comfort. I ended up cutting my hair to be like Mom's. Trying to play strong is hard. Time doesn't make it easier. Only have less break downs. But knowing you have other friends and family to be there for you? "You are not Alone." That is the most golden essence of need and true comfort. So thank you for writting this chapter this way.

Okay. I LOVE the magister story and the whole idea behind it. The character in the book and the name...you know what? Leandra, Hawke? Pass that book here when your done. I want to read it too! A kind, bold Magister rising against the prejudice for those who blame her kind? Maker yes! :DD

Even mostly knowing all this dialoge you got me to cry, darn it...probably because it was a double. TT_TT

Okay. That was awesome. I like inconventional ways of dealing with things. Who says the characters have to slaughter everything ALL the time? And she DID throw her sword aside and put her hands up. That does seem like a "I don't want to fight" type thing. I always wondered why no one ever tried since they are intelligent. (Aside from usual not liking death). I like the idea of her not being happy down there and trying to escape. I could think up a whole side story with that concept. Love it -

I really like how the arguing drove her to trying to get a peaceful rest. Also, Fenris is secretly very sweet. I am adoring this story. I also like how you changed the base dialoge since they all Just met after all.

Okay, I love how Bethany hates them. Makes PERFECT sence AND adds quite a surprizing amount to her character. The idea of poor training and the amounts of control is genius. I look forward to seeing how impressive Hawke's control is for the future. Also, that ending scene was excellent and flowed very well.

Isabela's walk useful? huh? never thought about that but yeah!...Maybe. lol I like how Anders is likeably amusing and charming. not angsty like many others write him. I like that Isabela is constantly flirting with Hawke. haha! but for a mage who doesn't use her powers a lot, she sure does. Not enough swordplay from her. Then again, kirkwall itself could be the turning point for that. And LOL, how many things is she gonna have to fix in the Chantry? If this becomes a running gag i'd die laughing! (Someone Should do that.) Especially cause that would just make the ending that much more interesting/insulting.

Fenris seems pretty well in character. More accepting of Hawke than I thought he would be but surely the conflicts begin more later. I actually like that he rushes in like that so Hawke has to watch his back. I enjoy that you explain everything thoroughly at the bottom. It shows your attention to detail, your cleverness, helps us understand better And makes me glad your communicating to us in a way thats not distracting from the story. Thank you for all that.

I have decided 2 things. 1) you must have sat there reading codex's forever, like i TRY doing before i get bored 1 hour in with no gameplay beyond reading. 2) DANG your a good writer! I LOVE how you improvise scenes and extend on them. Hawke's reluctance to be any kind of leader and eagerness to return to obsecurity, as well as her lack of self-confidence make her so much more real and a character to sympathise with. I also adore how quick-thinking she is and how we see her thoughts as conversations play out. Her sence of responsibility and protectiveness is also well written. I like how you portray Carver and Bethany like two kids always fighting or messing with eachother. That would defidently make Hawke have no choice but to step up as eldest. Not fond of how weak Bethany is but her meekness creates a good balance with Hawke and Carver. Carver is well balanced with his typical grumpy, selfish self, but i love how you compare them to Gamlen and Leandra.

I like what you did with Anders' story and leaned it more from just some crazy, zealous save-the-mages to this. I wonder how you will portray Fenris? You have proven youself very insightful and clever so i look forward to it all.