Okeey! That was really sweet but I can't get over what happened to Doppie! And I'm still trying to like them, not quite there yet. Sam, probably but not Lara... Feels kinda bittersweet...

This story has been quite a ride! I can't imagine all the work you had to do for all of the plot. I can't commend that enough but you did end up sorta making me dislike your Lara... and even Sam to an extent. They come off as quite materialistic and shallow when it comes to anyone other than themselves. Not good qualities for heroes for sure. And they wouldn't even give someone who saved Lara from life in prison other than a 'rot in prison'... I don't know how I am supposed to like them after that. You definitely get points for the OCs, they were great. Amanda was a fucking champ! Natla owned her scenes. Blanket was super adorable. Bree and Min were a little stereotypical perhaps but they were still pretty great.

The complaints I have are Lara's stupidity and inability to learn from past mistakes. Her lack of compassion and inability to put herself in other's shoes. She was too self absorbed, so was Sam to an extent. These things led me to hate her at one point. There was a lack of a guide character, a voice of reason, so to speak, as well and the story felt like dragging quite a bit at times. The thing that most gets my knickers in a twist is the treatment of Doppie, she was essentially a hero and got treated like shit! Min got a really really bad deal as well... And I can't blame Amanda for anything at all, it's a miracle she controlled herself enough to help Lara. I'd have killed her the first chance I got! She murdered her father in cold blood for Chrissake! That was the point from where it was all downhill for Lara in my eyes and I was hoping she could redeem herself through this story but things ended up going the other way with Lara wanting to hit Amanda all the time even after she saved everyone... Come on...

I suppose I sound like a broken record now and I can still go on about Lara for thousands of words but I should try being positive so I'll focus on that. Everything other than Lara was a positive about this story and I felt reading through Laea's perspective hurt the story as she was the least likeable thing in here for me. The OCs were great, Amanda and Natla were great, plot was great, main characters not that much... the mcguffins served their purpose. The bit with sleep deprivation hit too close to home for me and was a pretty neat thing to include. In conclusion, a solid story that was very well written for the most part.

Okay, so Doppie got the worst of it as well... I wish she didn't have to bear all the blame... I mean, come on! She didn't even do anything other than help Lara. and this is the thanks she gets? Not even a fucking acknowledgement from Lara or Sam? Honestly, just when I thought I could like them again... Not a nice way to end this...They just feel so detached, I'd rather have Amanda be the hero. Or perhaps even Doppie with her daring prison escape and faking her own death! Have her join our duo perhaps?

I think the camera would be a nice enough gift, really! I am so forking glad Amanda is alive, and Blanket too... I hope we can do something about Min because she ended up getting the worst of it along with Sam. Lara is still kinda hard to like but I am trying... I so want Sam and Amanda to get along. They'd be hilarious together and Sam needs to admit she was wrong about Amanda, and her addiction also needs to be addressed...

What happened to Min absolutely sucks! And this is way better than the punchy-kicky-shooty bits! And I am at a point where I am neutral about Lara. Don't like her yet but it was a job well done! Things got a bit too hairy a few chapters ago and this story was so very close to losing me but you pulled it off! I hope she becomes likeable to me again. Also, need to figure out a way to get rid of the spirits on Amanda and Lara. Have Amanda eat properly for a month or so and catch up on sleep while we are at it too. I like her.

Took them bloody long enough! And what exactly happenend to Min and Blanket? I can't wait to find out.

I hadn't expected the ending line to be a somewhat common youtube comment! Would the slave stone even work on her though? If it does it's sort of a shame to lose such a compelling villain and if it doesn't well... I suppose everyone is screwed until Lara finds another way.

Good lord.. we're here! I hate Lara now! Not the mind controlled Lara but the real Lara! 'Oh how i wish I could understand Amanda but I'm angry and would rather kill her instead', 'Oh, how I wish I could understanf how Diane did it, but I am tired'...

Lara has made me slap my forehead more than what would be considered normal, even for an idiot like me who makes stupid mistakes all the time. And not acknowledging Doppie's act as anything other than Natla's doing, how blinded by idiocy can one person get? She fucking told you she was in the same goddamn boat as you, you twat! *sigh*

The first sensible thing that has happenend in a long time! She really think she can go around killing people without consequences? also, worry about min later? Really, Lara? I think she's actively trying to make me hate her now. Also that part about not understanding Amanda, last I checked punching someone unconscious wasn't the best way to understand someone unless you were trying to understand how many punches it took to separate them from consciousness... Good lord... you might have ruined your Lara for me... I hope you can do something about this because I won't be able to take much more of this Lara...

About damn time, you sodding idiot! Sam doesn't deserve any of this. And if you'd tried to talk to Amanda before instead of using your guns and fists, perhaps you could have aboided this but noooooooo, killing everything that moves is the answer! God, Lara is not doing well in the 'making me like her again' department! Natla, however, and Amanda too, are doing a much better job even though Natla is being sickeningly evil and Amanda is as vague as ever. Dumbass! Anyway, I thought Lara was supposed to be something of a good guy, perhaps even an anti hero of sorts... all those misconceptions are cleared now and I want Natla to succeed. Knowing she won't just makes me really sad and depressed.

Okay, now we're getting somewhere! Digging this vengeful Natla to be honest! Lara sure has her work cut out for her... Save Sam, Min, Bree, Macca, Jamas, Blanket, kill Natla, Amanda, Doppie and those slave mercenaries, possibly Diane as well (although I hope she doesn't kill Amanda and Doppie but hoping that is akin to hoping water won't be wet), destroy the scion and the slave stone, somehow get over the viral video thing... And most importantly to me right now- make me like her again. Holy hell!

It's quite amazing how one's perspective changes at the things happening in a story when one doesn't like the character those things are happening to...

Well, here is the first stupid thing! Lara, go home, you're predictable! Oh, how I wish things didn't have to be this way...

Doppy! Pipe down, excited me, she's just another name to be added to the list of deaths.

Okay, I was probably a bit too harsh in my last couple of reviews but I felt that way at the time. The thing I was kinda reading this to sorta relax during work but it stressed me out more than work and the duration of the stress just had me so frustrated!

I still can't bring myself to like Lara though and I have to admit, Natla made a brilliant psychological move with the video. An introverted celebrity being exposed like that... I suppose I should sympathise with Lara but I just don't like her anymore. She will just kill all those in her way eventually with zero regret and go about more unearthing mystical shit in mystical places and wonder again why does it have to be her. She made the choices that led her here, no one else.

Anyway, what's sorely missing from this story is a level headed guide for the lady with the murder boner. You'd think Lara would have learnt something by now... *sigh*

This is getting rather ridiculous! I wish we could just concentrate on the main plot(?) and not have things happening that just keep drawing this out... I am quite invested in this story though and hope to goat that Lara becomes likeable again. I don't know if this is deliberate or a side effect.

Also, This gets me wondering about what the old Lara was like. From what I've heard/read of people's opinions, she appears to be a pompous snobby posh British tart and they like that version more than the rebooted whiny Lara with daddy issues and a lady-boner murder, apparently. I only have a problem with the rebooted Lara's daddy issues and utter disregard for a best friend. I would probably hate the old Lara.

If I am being honest I prefer stories about people sorting out their differences by communication and common sense. All this punchy-kicky-shooty stuff has oversaturated everything from movies to games and I would prefer if it wasn't such a central theme in stories, especially fan fiction. I'd much rather have Lara being a stealthy batman-esque badass who tends to avoid killing if possible, not plan to murder someone out of anger and hatred. That's why I like drama/fluff pieces a lot more than action because character interactions are the most important part of any story to me.

I don't even know what I am talking about anymore... anyway, seeing Lara like this is seriously hampering my ability to enjoy the story, which is still a good story but the characters have lost a lot of their charm.

I can't believe I am saying this but I find it really hard to like this Lara... even more so than the Lara in Rise. She was kinda bland and extremely repetitive with all her 'I wish dad was alive to see this', etc. but this Lara is just a savage brute. She killed her ally without thinking and now seems to think that killing everyone is the answer. Sam isn't much better with all her insecurities and extremely non-sensical ways of dealing with them. The only really likeable character seems to be Natla just because she isn't behaving like a c*nt. A manipulative demi god exploiting others, yes but still not as bad as Lara, Amanda and Sam. The OCs are fine as well but I don't really care much about OCs. They usually are some sort of mary-sues or gary-stus or sacrificial fodder for one thing or another.
I can't believe I actually like Natla more than Lara... Woah! And it seems like I know where this is headed, let's hope I am wrong. I am quite disappointed in the fact that we had all this build-up for a confrontation with Amanda and all they could do was have a fist fight and a shootout/monster attack. Whatever the hell happened to doing the grown up thing of talking? Like Natla is doing for the time being. This feels like the way a teenage gamer would resolve a situation in an action game. I am sure these idiots could have come up with something useful to do by cooperating and helping each other and finding a way to deal with Natla. That's too much to expect I suppose. *sigh*

Well, poop de la creme! Everyone is screwed now... especially Amanda and probably Blanket. I don't suppose this is gonna be like those sandbox games where the children are invinsible, right? *sigh* Let's just get on with it... but if lava couldn't do it, what the bloody hell can they try now? I doubt an AK47 is gonna cut it.