OMG THIS WAS SO GOOD I FEEL LIKE CRYING...HOW DARE YOU DO THIS TO MY FEELS?! T.T

Great story, loved the ending. I think you should write more about their childhood. Great job!

Awesome job, and I loved the ending. Keep on writing!

I like it! :)

Manly tears at this absolutely adorable story.

Ermagherd, so adorable. I love the two of them together, maybe I should write my own?

Nah, I'm not that good at writing.

Aww... cute! I liked this story a lot! I loved their closeness that you showed when they were still children. I hope you'll write more! :)

SO CUTE OMG I'M DYING! TwT I looved the end :3

;_; so beautiful

Nice one!
You should made a story of them, I'll be pleaced to read it, I'll follow you, so, I'll be waiting :3

Awwww that was so sweet! :)

This was a really cute fic. Good job!

Awwwwwwww. It's so clingy and adorable. I'm practically squishing my face.

Good job on getting another fic out! This fic has a cute idea behind it, just like your first one! I think you might need to get a good beta to proofread your work before you publish it though, if you are serious about improving. :) If you don't have anyone to show you what you're doing wrong, it will be hard for you to improve! It's mainly the English. Minor mistakes here and there and some descriptions that could be better. It holds you back. There's a good writer in there, you just need to work hard to improve your grasp of the language.

Patience is a virtue. :) Once you've finished writing, re-read your work, and re-read it again. Edit whatever mistakes you see, then go through it again! That's what I do. Besides having the well-trained eyes of my two betas inspect every bit of my stories, I meticulously chop and change my drafts by myself all the time. The finished work is never the same as the initial draft! Haha.

Do not worry! Language can be learned. Writing can be improved! But the mind of a story-teller is something you're either born with or not. You have the mind of a story-teller. :) Don't give up!