who in their right mind would ever voluntary fight GALACTUS if they didn't have to ? that's crazy. the pressure has clearly driven them mad. anyway i guess it could be a test for HARRY POTTER to see far he has come & how far more he has to go. this is an interesting chapter. i NEVER thought i would say this but where is the UNBEATABLE SQUIRREL GIRL ? , when you need her. they need her. most times that someone has beaten GALACTUS , its been because of a weird plot device or Deus Ex Machina type situation , so no doubt it's going to be weird. anyway i hope you & your family are okay. STAY HEALTHY STAY SAFE. TAKE CARE.

Okay, well. Almost two million words later, here we are.
First off, I like the story so far. If I didn't, believe me I wouldn't have slogged through it. That being said, I do have a few things to say.
First, your editing is, for the most part, only so-so. You have a real problem with using words that sound the same, but are the wrong word. Most of the time I can forgive this without too much irritation, it's a mistake we all make when the fingers start flashing over the keyboard. But there is one part of this that you really should fix when you have a few spare minutes. "Reed" not "read." It shows up often enough it almost has to be an issue with your spellchecker, but even still. It makes me roll my eyes to see it every time. Most of the other issues like this I suspect are actually spellchecker related as well, so unfortunately I suspect it will take you a while to find them. Technically, they are spelled correctly after all. They are just the wrong word. Not gonna lie, if it was me I probably wouldn't bother trying to fix this. It isn't like you are getting paid after all and it would take days to go through all this if you were to try and deal with it. I only mention it in case you want to bother with being more careful moving forward. This is my only real problem with your prose that I wouldn't consider entirely my own opinion, so take everything else on this list for a grain of salt. I have no illusions that my opinion speaks for anyone but myself.
Second, you have an enormous cast in this. Huge. There is nothing wrong with that. But you are commonly using more than one name for pretty much every character. For the main characters, that's fine. No worries. For some of the less important characters though, it can get troublesome. When I find myself hopping on google to find out who in the hell in the marvel universe has the first name "Wendy" then I think there is a slight problem. To put it another way, it feels at times like trying to read "Dune" again, only with every character being called two or three different things and there not always being enough other information around it to let me know just who the hell that is.
Third, your fight scenes can drag on a bit. I love the combat, seriously. And often times this isnt't a problem. But more than I would personally prefer, particularly during "Winter War 2.0" I found myself skipping ahead occasionally looking for dialogue.
Fourth, You do the same thing that a lot of fanfiction writers will where you will describe something in such a way that you compare it to something else that also exists only in fiction. Meaning that the only way for somebody who isn't familiar with that other fiction to know what the hell you are talking about is to again, dial up prof. google. This one you don't do nearly as often, though in a recent example that I remember merely because it was in the most recent chapter, while it is horrible to contemplate, there are people out there that have no idea what a Klingon Bird of Prey looks like. (I'm not one of them, but I think you can follow my point.)
Fifth, you are greasing a hell of a lot of bad guys. Now, I totally get that you are cleaning up Earth so you can move into galactic and interdimensional conflicts. Between Thanos, the Shadows, The Kree, Galactus, the Skrull, various pissed off demon lords trying to break back in, Apocalypse, and even the Badoon, you have enough random plotlines to keep you busy for a good long while. But even still, I'm not lying when I say that I died a little on the inside when you basically greased the entirety of the Sinister Six in what amounts to about a half a chapter. And when you had Hela confirm that Mr. Sinister was actually gone rather than having us find out that he was actually a clone in another fifteen chapters or so, yeah. There might have been a tad bit of tooth grinding going on there.
As to the good, you are doing a pretty good job keeping the different characters voices distinct, which is frankly amazing given the size of your cast. It can be argued until the end of time whether or not those voices are out of character, but I always figured that anybody worried about that really ought to stop reading fanfiction anyway. So I am not going to bother with that aside from to say that the characters I am familiar with seem to be done well enough that if there are any serious problems I am not seeing them. I applaud you for using the Starjammer rather than falling back on the Guardians of the Galaxy. Don't get me wrong, I love both. But since the movies, the Guardians are getting a tad bit overdone in fanfiction. It's nice to see somebody taking a different route.
Anyway, I think that is enough for now. I hope you don't mind the critique, because I am very interested in seeing more. And thank you very much for your efforts!

Really enjoying the story and looking forward to more!

This was the first story of yours I have ever read, before I noticed Wild Wolf, which soon became my favorite. Now I've once more caught up with this HP/Marvel xover, reading more than a year's worth of updates in one day, and I'm split on it.

On the one hand, it's amazing that you're still writing this. It has brought up feelings of nostalgia in me and it made me remember why I enjoyed it so much in the beginning.

On the other, I'm sad that you've started spreading yourself so thin. Your writing output seems to be on the same level if not higher as back then, but splitting your attention between so many projects can be seen in the writing. It hurts the flow of your stories, because time constraints and manageable chapter length apparently don't let you spend enough time on other areas of importance, such as its pacing. To be more precise, this applies only to ATP, which is the one active story of yours I can comment on.

Maybe I would think differently if I were to read all of your current works and keep up with them monthly. It's a distinct possibility that I'd think differently. I know myself as a lover of completed stories however and am always hesitant to follow works in progress without a clear map that marks the path from start to finish. This isn't even a time issue or the matter of a posting schedule, but the knowledge that the author plans ahead when and where he's going to step next.

With years of hindsight I would categorize ATP as the same kind of result that semi-professional writers attempt with Kindle Unlimited. Instead of telling a story the way it should be told, their ideas get artificially dragged out in numerous sequels, merely to attain the goal of a stable monthly income. This destroys the pace and usually hurts the storytelling massively. I fully realize that a comparison with your fanfiction is not totally fair or exactly spot-on, but that's what your recent writing feels like to me.

Maybe this story would be very different if you didn't always (have to) resort to writing one chapter of this and then half a dozen chapters of something else. Maybe I'm wrong, but I recall Wild Wolf which is a lot better put together, so I know you have the ability and talent.

Anyway, despite this criticism, I'll no doubt come back to this story in the future and I'll take enjoyment from it again. I also wish to thank you for all the work you (and the team of beta/proofreaders you've employed over the years) have put in. Closing in on 2 million words soon, I can only imagine that the time spent on this has been staggering!

This story is so amazing I have to re read huge chunks of it to remind myself what all has happened in between times since I like to let a few chapters build up but for this kind of action it's well worth it good job

Hey m8, I just spent the last couple of weeks reading through this story and I'm quite impressed by both the length and the imagination you put in your work. I'm especially glad that you decided to use the entire Marvel universe instead of only the MCU. There are a few more compliments I could make, but I think that criticism (hopefully constructive) could help more than flattery.

The thing that bothered me the most was the lack of consistency in a lot of things that I've read through (sometimes in the same chapter). I understand that it takes a lot of time and effort to write this much (so much that you probably forgot that you already wrote something up and then rewrote it in another way later on) and I think you have a copious amount of notes on what's going on, but it happens so often that I just couldn't ignore it.

For instance, the numerous times that various names of things change throughout the chapters. The asteroid base and the kingdom/empire have done this a bunch of times. While I understood what the characters were talking about it got annoying.

Also, there were characters that got introduced or did something in a previous chapter and then they get introduced and do other things in a later chapter (the new mutants that joined the X-Men and Dum Dum after the fall of SHIELD for instance).

But the thing that most bothered me from the examples is the loose timeline of how things happened. For instance, Jean got pregnant at around late June/early July by my reckoning, but later it gets mentioned she's in her 7th month of pregnancy and then the marriage with Emma is at the end of November. This doesn't make sense at all. And then there's the constant "school will start soon" thing in the middle chapters where the end of August lasts for like two months.

All in all, there are a bunch of time errors that annoyed me (not in the way in which tech advanced because I don't care about that, but just in the way that the time that passed and the way that people mentioned that time passed doesn't make sense).

I hope that you don't think that I dislike your story because of these criticisms, I just think that it could be improved a lot if you took these criticisms to heart and/or took the time (which I understand it would take a lot) to fix the errors.

Anyway, thanks a lot for entertaining me for so long! Good luck m8!

you really need to go over and fix these sentence mistakes. its getting so hard to read that I would almost assume it wasnt originally written in english

Just catching up with this story and bit sad to see how it's been downgraded in your writing que. I remember when you started the patreon thing and claimed this story was the main one and would always be updated... now it's a small story vote for next month.

also maybe read through your stuff once or twice before posting. the mispelling and badly structured sentences is getting to be too much

you really need to fix your continuity errors its getting ridiculous

i really wish this was set in the 2000s with more mcu. the mcu lore feels much less ridiculous than the marvel lore. Spandex has never made sense and a more modern design of heroes and villans is just so much better

Looking forward to your next chapter.

Looking forward to your next chapter

I like this fic. but 100k for per percent of Stark stock? the entire start company will be worth 10 million then? what kinda childish shit is this and giving the stock to a girl he barely knows? that's just you fantasizing about putting your dick in her man, do you know anything about stocks and what each stock would be worth? lol in Iron man's first movie where he was kidnapped by terrorists he talked about selling those rockets worth about half a billion dollars worth. tech companies were worth billions at that time and worth in trillions now. the last war US waged after 9/11 cost trillions of US taxpayers dollars. when you are putting stuff down monetary wise please research what you are writing dude. glad to see you are still posting chapters on this fic though :)

Given the team knows of Sinister's involvement at the Vault, I'm wondering why the possibility of one of his doppelgangers being left in place of a prisoner wasn't brought up. This would lead to the question of those individuals taken by the Apocalypse devotee.
-ArturiusRex8