Lol, brill read. I just discovered ur San Fran stories here and am enjoying the heck outta them. ;)
Poor Steve, man. Just a mere mortal with logical thinking. ;)
Thanks for posting. :D

Very well written and good. I enjoyed this story very much.

Thank you

I am slowly going through trying to find stories I have missed reviewing over time I promise to get to them all. I loved this story I could see the shows perfectly reading it there were so many times that Mike had trouble apologizing when he was wrong but still you could feel and see how much he and Steve thought of each other this story was excellent!

You gotta feel for Steve. I mean, he finally admits to how he feels about Jeannie, because the only honest-to-goodness displays of affection I saw on the show were hugs, cheeks kisses and the time when he told her to bite down on a pillow. Of course, that was in 'Endgame' when she purposely left the house in disarray and burned Mike's supper.

Did not see the ending coming but utterly perfect choice.

Wow, firstly here is my belated welcome note to the fandom!

I was excited to see a new writer here then when I started reading your story my jaw must've dropped several inches. I have to say that I am impressed and in awe by your story. Not only because this was such a fine effort for your first fan fiction story but you chose to take up the challenge of writing in first person POV and you did it in style. Your take on Steve is spot-on and Mike's stubborness when it comes to admitting he was wrong is canon to the way the series portrays him. I recall in "The Cat's Paw", how Mike was fighting an internal battle with himself when he couldn't admit to Irene Martin she was right and he was wrong. I remember Steve teasing Mike about it in the office.

I also thought having Mike and Steve respond to the shootout was an effective way to get one of them to apologize and keeping true to the characters I really liked how it was Steve who did the apologizing.

Another highlight is the canon fact that Steve is not successful when it comes to keeping a relationship in the series. None of the women he was involved with worked out for varies reasons and I liked how you had Steve discover that he and his ex-girl would never have worked out anyway given her reaction when he had to bail out of their dinner date resulting in a heated argument. I could picture Mike waiting for Steve outside her place LOL.

Brilliant last line on bringing Lenny into this.

All in all, this is a fantastic read. Please write more for us :-)

Very nicely done, I think you've caught their voices very well. I'm looking forward to seeing more SOSF fic from you, good job! :)

Enjoyed reading your first effort at writing fanfiction, especially Streets of Francisco.
Now need one from Mike's point of view.
Keep up the good works.
Waiting for your next Story.
Nans

This was great, a really awesome start into writing! I'm glad you shared it us! :) I recently watched "License to Kill", one of the times that Mike apologized to Steve, and you're spot-on with your describtion of Mike's way of apologizing, that he rarely says it out loud but tries to show it through gestures. You got both Steve's and Mike's temper down great, and you showed their love for each other, that despite being at odds they'd still lay down their life for the other one without thinking. I LOVE the last line, not only because Lenny's a favorite character of mine, but because it comes unexpected. Great job, I'm looking forward to read more from you!

Excellent and funny story! I like the headache backstory and can imagine Mike driving Steve crazy. Please do more!

That was a super first outing and I really do hope to see more from you! Well done. you captured the characters very well indeed.

This is one terrific story! A first person tale is a challenge to write, but you have handle it to perfection. Steve's anger and annoyance is palpable. I wouldn't want to be the target of his wrath.

Your line about "facing the wrath of Stone" is right on. And that last line-perfect!

Briroch - this is some fantastic writing!
I would like to copy into this field my favourite sentences, but they don't accept entire chapters as reviews...
Write on, please, and soon!
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