Reviews for Harry Potter: King of the Amazons
Noctus Of The Thousand Blades chapter 9 . 7/22
okay, this is where i stop. the idea started interesting, if a little unbelievable. (the ritual part made little to no sense.) but from there the story has spiralled into and beyond Cliche territory, and into pure "WTF did i just read?"

the overall plot is lacking, the story elements are cliche and overused in several other fics. and harry is so ridiculously overpowered politically that there is no hope of any real progression.

this in turn causes the overall plot to quickly become stagnant and boring.

Lordships, goblin alliance, harems, bashing of weasleys, dumbledore and hermione. all of these are vastly overused in fanfiction, and have quickly become tedious. they do not "Improve" the story. they bog it down and make reading such stories a slog.

now, let me clarify something. i have ZERO issues with many of these elements most of the time. IF! and i do stress IF! they are used sparingly and integrated properly. as in they become interesting tidbits that help to flesh out a character or scene, but do not become a hammer you smack over the readers head.

the whole "you cannot stop me Dumbledore because i am more powerful than you in every way!", that is my main issue. you have all but turned harry into an over the top mustache twirling VILLAIN.

the idiotic kind that monologues at the hero while the hero is inching towards the one button/item that will derail all the villains plans. only in this case the hero is a bumbling moron who blows himself up in the attempt, leaving the villain standing before his throne blinking at the stupidity of what just happened.

i might have let things slide, until you brought in the descendants of Herakles/Hercules and Theseus as organizations dedicated to bringing down the amazons, mostly out of petty jealousy.

at that point the story became unreadable to me.

so i am sorry if i am being Harsh, but that is my take away from reading the 9 chapters that i have.

this is not a flame, this is not me being a troll, this is my honest opinion on this story.

the overarching concept of Harry being raised by the Amazons? that has promise, and could make for an awesome story if done right... this was not that story. this felt like an example of Murphy's Law at play. everything that COULD go wrong with this story? DID go wrong.

now i am sure you have many other readers who like this story for whatever reason. to them and you i say, "good for you. i completely disagree with your taste, but good for you."

maybe i'll glance over another of your fics someday, but if they are anything like this? it pretty unlikely.

still, despite my dislike of this story, i do not want to discourage you from writing. personally i think there is SOME promise here, mostly in sentence structure, paragraph placement, grammar, etc.

its not badly WRITTEN, just badly EXECUTED. looking at this from a distance? it's not badly constructed all things considered. its the story elements that simply aren't clicking.

so this is me signing off.

i wish you god luck with this and all your current and future stories.

as i said, i may dislike them, but i don't want you to stop writing.

and as always,

thank you for your time.
ILoveGeorgeEads chapter 37 . 7/21
I loved loved loved loved loved loved loved loved it.
Scarecrow94 chapter 1 . 7/19
Thanks
WhiteWolf65 chapter 37 . 7/18
Awesome
TouchMe-San chapter 3 . 7/18
AN: Wow I'm mad I kinda chuckled
thomaspheasant chapter 37 . 7/17
please update immediately
Ashkan Dehno chapter 37 . 7/15
Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far
lou2003us chapter 37 . 7/14
I hope she survives. I really want to see what happens next. Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the great work boss!
God of the Challenge chapter 37 . 7/14
Wait a second, you're gonna finish TWO stories?

What sort of loopy land have I entered?
Power of Magic chapter 37 . 7/14
A good chapter and glad that your back. Looking forward to seeing how things go in the next chapter, and I hope that you update soon
A10riddick chapter 37 . 7/14
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!
JustBored21 chapter 37 . 7/14
Great chapter and story, eagerly waiting for more
A10riddick chapter 15 . 7/14
Great chapter!

I can see the Weasly twins befriending Harry and becoming the Royal Court Jesters while having their own joke shop!

Q bloody brilliant screw you idea to their fathers would be for to 2 girl twins to hook up with Harry and the 2 twin boys to hook up with 2 amazon girls.
Wishfull-star chapter 37 . 7/14
I hope that Propheta doesn't lose the baby she's carrying because of this, awesome chapter and I can't wait for whatever happens next:) stay safe
Esmereilda chapter 37 . 7/13
likely not but I doubt things will go well for rowle or his date
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