It's a great story and please continue the story!

The hell I will Kishimoto cock sucker.

great so far continue please

Nice story so far, the only problem I see is a bit of a pacing issue, I feel that there should have been a learning curve with Naruto, like him having difficulty learning a technique and then having him overcome them and pulling pranks on people for attention like he did in the early parts of the manga and anime.

I would like to see you continue and hope you overcome your writer's block because I know how troublesome it is when you're trying to write a good story.

I loved and laughed at the part when you said that goku got to train Naruto because he beat vegta by beating in rock, paper, and scissors. I can so totally goku and vegta doing that.

You might want to delete this note, even if deletion of stories are not to common right now.

Excellent chapter. I thought it was much better then the first, though I am hoping that the oc's you have introduced in this chapter are only capable of equaling the z fighters in a fight and not easily overpowering them.
As for the poll on the pairing for the story, while I have voted I want to say that I think female Haku would be the best fit for Naruto due to her character and abilities, followed closely by Hinata for the same reasons. While I would like to see Pan stay in the sister role howver I prefer Naruto/Pan over Sakura or Ino if you intend to have them stay in character that is.
Could you pm me on the way your going to write Sakura and Ino if either of them were to win the poll, I think if they were calmer and more understanding then they could give Naruto what he needs in the same ways that Haku or Hinata would be able to.
Finally on whether you will have Naruto gain mystic power or Transform, I hope he gets the mystic power without ever transforming. I also find being able to push your base power to equal a ssj 3 is unique and more interesting when compared to the ssj transformations as well as more practical. So mystic power is what I'm guessing you will give him.

The end part was rushed, but I like this story and think its good.

Try to lengthen the story, it's what attracts most readers, the length. I like that this story is the first one of its kind I've seen, I do hope you can do more later. If you need help or a BETA, i can do that for you.

interesting story but the poll isn't up yet

i got soem quiestsions..y is naruto learnign slower thne pan? the only reason he learned slow in the canon was cuz he has no body to teach him..tho naruto was a very fast learner even when he didnt have a teach learned shadow clone in a few hours and it took prolly even the best ninja days/weeks even learned the rasegen in like a month so idk y ud make her stronger then naruto

Nice idea for a story, but you are overpowering them too early. They are more human than sayian so think about how muscles and everything grows for humans esp at a young age. Also the shinigami taking power from Gohan? Think about it, he is more powerful than any of the gods in DB universe so something like the shinigami couldn't take his power. Also I think it would be a more enjoyable story if Naruto wasn't a sayian. If he has learned to utilise his Ki he wont be able to meld his physical and spiritual energy to form chakra. Also for future if he can use kaio ken attack and spirit bomb he is pure of heart so won't have to confort his 'dark' side to use the 9 tails power.

u went this shit like a hot knife thru butter.

Sounds you need few things, I think.

a co-author and beta-reader.

No worries. I just read your first chapter and it awesome. Very interesting.