This was a good story with a decent plot but I have a little friendly advice: get someone who knows the English language well to look over your work before you publish it. There were several instances of misspellings and wrong word choices. For example: the differences between quiet and quite, your and you’re, accept and except, affect and effect, among others. Additionally, you need to brush up on when to use commas (and other punctuationin some instances you used them where they shouldn’t have been written and in other instances didn’t use them when you should have. Lastly, you had way too many run on sentences and it made what you were trying to say confusing and more difficult to read. Like I said, your story was good until the end, which came quickly and abruptly and didn’t allow for much closure. Hopefully you take this advice into consideration the next time you write. Best of luck!

This was absolutely adorable and I loved it.

Snape was NOT a good man. He was an abusive bully, who did everything he could to poison a child against the father he'd never know and a man who wasn't able to even defend himself or give his side. There is no retconning the way Snape treated Harry thru the first 5 books, no matter what Rowling tried to do. His attempt to have Sirius MURDERED in the 3rd book, despite knowing the truth showed the truest character of the man. Snape had no honor, nor should he have been mourned.

Pretty sudden ending. Spoilt the story and didn't give closure :(

Great story

Though the premise for this story is really interesting, the sentence structure is fairly below standard and there are some spelling errors like, "My son gets to spent his holidays with Harry fucking Potter but not me, his own dad." It's meant to be "spend" his holidays, not "spent".

Had a good laugh XD! I love zara :P great story!

This was great! So heartbreaking in the beginning, and so well written. Loved the slow relationship build too. Nice job.

Literally crying right now, ohmy gosh.

I think it would be awesome with some sequels... like Lilli finding someone... ... and it would be amazing if Scorpius and Albus got together. Just saying.

I loved it so much, definitely one of my favs!

Wow, you are off to a really good start. First impressions:
Harry - fair, reasonable, loves his kids, unsure about Draco
Draco - broken by the War, his marriage and the falling out with his son
Albus- really sweet and cute
James - carbon copy of James Potter Sr.
Scorpius - angry, proud, probably loves his mother more than anything
Can't wait to read chapter 2 :)

Awww...this was a great story sad that its over.

I really truly loved this story it was a wonderful one and amazing to read thank you:D!

Astoria is slime. I can't believe she did this to her child, made him believe the worst about him just because of how Draco grew up. It just makes me so sad that a parent would do this to their child. I'd rather that my child had a father who did terrible things than no father at all.

I finally was able to finish this. I think this is one of my favorite plot lines you have ever written. This one and Surviving. Your writing never ceases to amaze me