Reviews for Storms Overhead
AMurder0fCrows chapter 2 . 7/20
he's a mary sue 110%. good thing i found out early so i don't waste my time and energy reading this further.
AMurder0fCrows chapter 1 . 7/20
ugh, i found another generic teenager mc again. the only thing to define him being his lightning. joy...
AMurder0fCrows chapter 1 . 7/20
and he's already a failed character in my book. someone oh so dangerous wasn't able to react to normal kiss on his own lips. garbage. at least in this one it brings attention to the fact that that rune bends your mind to be a good little slave.
webzayne717 chapter 6 . 6/26
I might come back to this, but I'm just a bit too put off with the mind control runes. Erasing memories doesn't really serve a purpose, subtly influencing emotions does to an extent.
Dcwestby chapter 16 . 6/17
I just want to apologize a bit for my ch14 review thing, but I felt I needed to say something about that Gutenburg like situation. I enjoy reading this, and I've still got.. 45 chapters to go...
DcWestby chapter 14 . 6/17
In some respects, I think that doing the printing press thing with their holy texts was a bit too obvious... IMO, you couldve simply kept to the books in the school and simply copied those... Oh well.
rasengan uzumaki eien chapter 61 . 6/9
So I'm on chapter 48, (posted here for visibility and while this is still fresh in my mind.) and I'm thoroughly hooked on the story, and you did an amazing job writing Siesta. I normally can't stand her character, she kind of for me at least became the Hinata of the FoZ universe where she is the pairing in most of the stories and it gets to the point that all stories just end up feeling too similar.
My only real problem with the story as a whole is the lack of backstop for Kurt, which I know may sound odd but I really enjoyed the flashacks to New Marais especially since as I've gotten later in chapters a lot of the motivation when all these potential relationships are reaching a tipping point, Kurt has always answered because of Cynthia which he says he loved her but aside from that one little flashback chapter and one small segment where we learned how she died, there has been no growth to that rather large chunk of Kurt character. Basically I just wanted more depth to the back story of Kurt to really see how he ticks, the "I can't move on because of Cynthia" line still works but it's losing its weight when we haven't really seen anything and barely know of the character if she was such a huge impact on his life.

TL:DR I wish you didn't stop doing the back story segments into New Marais and the relationship between Kurt and Cynthia.
Guest chapter 1 . 6/6
Must be hard for "Gig" (GREAT name by the way) to walk with that spineless condition of his.
Dasgun chapter 61 . 6/4
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Sonic245 chapter 56 . 4/15
I was expect Give my Wings song for the final battle
Guest chapter 43 . 4/10
You know, it's rather cruel to lead people on like that. You gave that poll asking for public opinion even if you said it wouldn't effect your decision on the story. It leads some of us to assume that she might survive.
Even after she died last chapter I tried to read anyway ,after all fakeouts happened in other stories right? but I couldn't even finish the chapter before I found myself just skimming. I get it, Character death happens. But when your readers get emotionally invested in a character and you kill them off, two things can happen:
1. they continue reading, hoping that it will get better, that a happy ending is reachable.

2. They became disheartened. They can't stand to read it anymore and leave.

Maybe it could have worked, but this time it had two things against it.
One was the polls that, while you said had no effect on the story, still insinuated she had a future. The others? The actions of the queen. It was hinted that she was after him, but seeing that train wreck happen does no favors for the upcoming sucker punch.
spartan-140 chapter 61 . 4/3
heyo,how long has it been , i dont even remember what the original fight was like, but still glad to see youre ok,
and if you are considering special requests, *clap clap* , Kurt Harem chapter please!
Maurz chapter 4 . 1/26
Yikes
TMI Fairy chapter 1 . 1/14
Meh.
I stopped reading at the riding crop treatment ... he should had blasted her, or kicked her teeth in.
Guest chapter 27 . 10/16/2019
Ugh so Louise was raped is what your saying. Let me tell you. Your the seventeenth to have loli rape you sick fuck. Fucking pedophile.
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