When I was reading the different creatures, my mind jumped to an EDH (commander format of magic: the gathering) to two cards: 1 being Wood Elves and the other Llanawar Elves
I know this is totally random, but hey, I'm random so it's not that weird (for me anyway lol)

I like it already

Okay... so what if Victor is a submissive? Unless it makes him physically weak as a kitten, why the heck doesn't he physically fight back against UNWANTED dominants? With all that training he does for Quidditch that makes him a pro player, his body must have put on some heavy duty muscle over the years despite being a submissive, so why doesn't he use that muscle and training to take down unwanted dominates? *lol*

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out of curiosity because i am a little lost will there be a story about books 1-3 leading up to this or flashbacks or something?

I like they story but when I started reading it it felt like a lot of things had already happened as if this story was a sequel to another story and I just missed the first story or something, like how did Lucius and the diggorys get custody of Harry, and when did harrys relatipnship with draco get that intimate especially with the fact that before the inheritance if going by cannon they butted heads a lot. Also what happened to bill weasly? Overall though, your characters are great a bit off from cannon but that's to be expected when adding in creature inheritances, I like your general plot and the switching POVs reminds me of the heroes of olympus books.

I love your story! My only complaint is that Bill Weasley is the eldest brother not Charlie. But honestly that is such a small complaint. Lol I really enjoy the story plot. Good job and keep up the good work.

What the hell Cedric! Obviously he’s under the Imperious...but still! Lol now how are they going to explain Voldemort now us he still the same evil as he was or was that just Dumbledores machinations. I’m glad he gave up Wormtail that will allow Harry to have Sirius close publicly when Voldemort can’t be there...though how he is going to get Sirius to understand what happened in the graveyard will be anyone’s guess.

Really to publicly disparage and insult two visiting school...and I’m sorry Beaubaxton a school education future Death Eaters that’s almost to funny.

why don't you post more?:'( I like this story vary much and would like to read more.

This POV business is too distracting. I hope the story gets better than this first chapter.

I got as far as the sixth chapter.
All those different points of view. The million and one 'who's with whom' lines at the beginning of each chapter and all the drama make it very hard to read.
I'm sorry.

Hallo.
So, about this bashing thing, um... Is there really a reason for it? I don't mean to be rude and all but is it essential to the plot, are you experimenting, or do you just plain hate this characters? I'm genuinely curious. I really can't progress to the next part until I have a reason. I just can't stand fan fiction works that bash characters just because.
Thanks in advance.

This was such an interesting twist, yet it was amazing! Loved it •

I love this story!
And i love you're writing. The non perfect aspect kind of adds to the submissive/dominate storyline in my opinion
Your mate choices are awesome. I love all of them (though I am curious if Sirius has a mate)
I dont let anyone touch my work either so I understand. this just means you have the chance to improve yourrself
(and i like the reviews response on top then i know you're getting the praise you deserve)
I am looking forward to the rest of the story so thank you for sharing