Reviews for Naruto Chaos Mage
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 27 . 6/28
Oh! I see. Now I get it, lol
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 27 . 6/28
Tsunade is older than minato, and her sensei is Sarutobi Hiruzen
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 20 . 6/27
Guarantee is spelled with two "e" at the end, not a "y"
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 19 . 6/27
No one is two words. They need a space between them. And most of the times you used thequotation at the end of someone's name, you should have added an s afterwards unless it ends in s
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 18 . 6/27
It's supposed to be "Ei" or "Ay" depending on if you're using the Japanese true romanji or the phonetic English version. It's not just E.
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 18 . 6/27
If he's expendable, that means he's easy to replace, and they will do so the moment it's necessary. If the civilians aren't, that means they can't sacrifice him. There have been many other similar mistakes in the story so far, some of them completely break the flow of the story. If it wasn't for the fact I know you won't go back and fix this, I would have been pointing them out every chance I could get.
Kitsune Obsessed Freak chapter 6 . 6/27
Umm... Natural lightning is litteraly electric blue usually, or else a rather pale blue. Depends on how much power it has. That's also where the name for the colour electric blue comes from. It only goes almost white when the power would be enough to down a military jet with emp protection measures just by being within a few dozen meters of being hit by it. That info is from 2002 though, so do expect planes to be better than that now. But lightning is never yellow. That's just your eyes compensating for the flash when it's too bright and you look right at it. Do keep in mind, this info is from what I learned in 2002 in books, so it's rather old info. They probably have better info now online.
setokayba2n chapter 46 . 5/23
Good story, sadly no news about finishing the sequel
TheEmbodimentOfSins chapter 16 . 12/18/2019
Gotta agree with Sarutobi, he’s gaining all these powers but isn’t really trying to master them..
halo4hire chapter 3 . 12/9/2019
I tried, I really did try, but naruto was stupidly powerful, giving the steps that made him a sense of uselessness. There is no real challenge for him, no real adversity for him to overcome, no emotional draw to make us, the reader like the character you dreamed up. Just, ok, naruto is stupid powerful as a genin, he can take down adults without any effort. Wheres the emotional growth? The flavor?in the original jinchuriki reveal, there was so much drama, fuss, fluff, and tears, all over the reveal of naruto containing the fox. This felt really lacking in this take. Also, HES THIRTEEN! he shouldn't be making pqnties moist at that age. Great idea, great concept, needs a rework, no offense. Judging by the idea, as well as the way you present the characters, I believe you could make this better, I see the talent.
bsus1412 chapter 46 . 12/7/2019
Don’t listen to the haters. I’ve re-read this particular story at least four times and am starting on a fifth. These types of stories are catharsis for me, so keep up the good work!
mikekoetting5673 chapter 1 . 11/7/2019
There is seriously something wrong with you people don't like it don't read
Guest chapter 46 . 10/29/2019
Kairou1 go suck your dick in the corner
kairou1 chapter 1 . 10/28/2019
ignore these people, you do good work I hope you continue to do so
Guest chapter 1 . 10/18/2019
Don’t write, for the sake of everyone else’s sanity and brain cells.
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