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Well damn...I really liked that. It was very well made. I had forgotten about 10 paragraphs in that this was just a one shot. Now, I kinda wish I had the talent for drawing...I'd totally draw this up in Manga form if I could. I now feel ashamed that I had never heard of this until now. Wonderfully written. On top of that, you made me fall in love with female Kyuubi all over again. I both hate and love you for that.

Till I see you next,

Persona

Hope for more soon

It just goes to show you that it's constant love, admiration, kindness and loyalty that keeps most people and families together, if not for those two, he would have been very hurt...

Let us hail to the happy ending hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaiiiiiiiiiîïíīįìiiiiiiiiłłllllłłllllllllllllllllllll

that was the longest flashback ever i forgot it was till i got where it said flashback end,, but this is an amazing story i like the all the details two thumbs up!

I like this story, I was wondering if you can make another story, but pair Naruto with not just Neliel and Harribel, also Anko, Kurenai, Yugao, and Hana.

nice

Ehh... it could be worse, at least the lemon was decent but the story... it felt to much like a literal summarization of the plot, with the addition of an ooc nel and tier... but hey your story and at least it had a followable plot so its ok... -ish

Well that was short but lovely and sweet. But the grammar could use some work. Otherwise very good short story with a good plot.

you'd have fewer errors is you didn't use any commas at all. i've never seen so many commas in my life

Beside the beginning when you brought in Nel and Harribel all the way till the lemon part it's seen like I was reading a huge recap then a story consider how fast pace this is. As for hinata, why was she part of, I guess, naruto wives consider she didn't show up till the end?

now that was a great story.

I said it once again, you have a true talent for lemon.
But I have one question... what the hell Hinata is doing here anyways ? She was just... out of place, and come in the story at the last moment...
I wouldn't mind if this story was canon, though.

those lemons were very good, as well as the rest of the story. good job