awesome. can we get a sequel?

HOLLY #### I'M CRYING MY EYES OUT.

So Lee and naruto are dead

I loved how you wrote how lee and naruto felt about sakura and tenten it makes me feel the same way to what im going through right now on how the girl i love is with another man and on how i cant be with her because i cant face the fact of rejection if i were to, not go another day without seeing her face with her smile. I just wanted to say that i loved this story it made have connection to the real world and whats happening.

I literally just heard the song in Walmart!

Good story. Although I think it doesn't have much Angst to be in that category, perhaps Drama. Now, if it would have reflected the feelings of the two kunoichis about the consequent sure death of their teammates, that would have done it.

Well written. Thanks for sharing it.

This is actually good.
I like how the two girls didn't "fall for them all of a sudden".
Pacing is nice. A few spelling errors, but nonetheless good.
Love the song.
9/10 (bcoz of unclear "ending"...epilogue?)

will there be a sequel to this?

OMG THAT WAS AWESOME! Plz oh plz make a sequel!

Usually when I read a one shot or a chapter that has 5000 words I expect it to be filled with a lot of great content, but I felt that your story lacked in this regard.
First, dialogue and the song was too awkward and didn't mesh well with the overall story.
Second, the plot is very bad and very hard to follow with the characters acting irrationally.
And finally, the closure felt weak and an overall waste of time and some of the worst piece of angst I had read in a long time.

Hope your stories get better.

*Bashes you with a mallet that could knock out all 9 biju* You deserved that because you could also write the mission as a second chapter, make a third chapter with Sakura and Tenten in thought and possibly break up with their boyfriends, because with what you wrote, their death's are not yet guaranteed.

Good story I dont know if you want but maybe you should continue it with like 3 more chapters I think would be good

eww sasusaku and nejiten

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You should try to at least write rework your story (disclaimers don't cut it) so that it references the song (like it's playing on the radio in the background) instead of posting the lyrics to it. If you don't change it then your story could be removed/deleted by the admins here should you be reported.

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